A poem

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To the west, San Francisco
To the east, New Reno
To the north, Klamath
To the south, The NCR

So many places, so many centers, so many people, so many deaths. The wasteland is a fitting home for a species as stupid as us. On my shoulders I carry the burden of humanity, its suffering, its pain, it hope, its hatred. What I have I done to deserve this? I, like a Jesus of the Wasteland am shunned and stoned by the very people I have tried to save. why, why, why, WHY! Because I must, because humanity cannot take care of it self yet, it needs a teacher, a mother, a father, a friend, an enemy, I am all those things, I sacraficed tecahers, mothers, fathers, and friends, to become one to Humanity, I sacraficed MYSELF to help humanity, and what do I get in return, SPITE! and hatred and cruelty. But, it was my choice to do this, mine and mine alone, perhaps if I had knowen or understood what would come with it I might have choosed differently, but in the end I know I made the right choice. The whole is more important than the self but the self makes up the whole. I gave myself up long ago, and I can never, WILL never look back, I will go forward and never look back, I will always go forward....

To the west, San Francisco
To the east, New Reno
To the north, Klamath
To the south, The NCR


That is my semi-poem, I hope you enjoy it, please tell me what you think.

Skynet
 
Well, it does make sense, but it isn't a poem. In a sense, it's when a character is talking to himself onstage, telling us important details, but the other actors don't know what he's saying. It's ok, I guess.

That is not dead which can eternal
lie, and with strange eons even
death may die.
~Crowley
 
[font size=1" color="#FF0000]LAST EDITED ON Nov-06-00 AT 09:59PM (GMT)[p]Good point, but one problem, this is not a play, I was worried that people might think it was a, whats the word, ah! an aside I believe. an aside. So I added the beginning and end part (to the west...). The paragraph form symbolizes continuous thought process for those of you who may think I am writing in the "wrong" poetic style. Anywho, thanks for the advice, I shall think upon it next time I write, ever improving my writing skills.
 
Every written word is a poem, every spoken word is a poem, every thought is a poem. Grammer and structure concerns are for the idiot english teachers of the world. That, is a poem, and a good one at that too, GJ Skynet.


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Great poem, i'm normaly not much of a fan of poems but your's is actually quite good.

Hey i read it, that's a good sign with me and poems.
 
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