Fallout New Vegas: Scribes and Hunters

stonefire310

First time out of the vault
hey all, this is my first Fallout Fanfic, and just want some thoughts on the plot: Veronica is in love with her friend, the courier Maria Theresa Gonzalez, AKA Talon. CH. 1 is just the into to the plot, Ch.2 is Veronica telling Maria how she feels about her, Ch.3 on will be about Maria realizing her feelings for Veronica.

Fallout New Vegas: Scribes and Hunters

Chapter 1

Maria Theresa Gonzalez, aka Talon, former NCR soldier, sat in her room thinking about the time she Realized she was gay:

*Flashback*
“What are you saying, Babe” Mathew, Maria’s “Boyfriend” said.

“I am telling you I am a lesbian, so I am breaking up with you” Maria yelled at him.

“Fine, don’t come crying to me when your lesbian lover dumps you” He yelled slamming the door.

*End flashback*

Maria Theresa Gonzalez was just leaving to go to the Thorn and meet up with her lover, red Lucy, when Veronica saw her and said:

“So, you are going to the Thorn?”

“Yes, is that a problem?” Maria asked.

“Not really, except that she seems the type to be with anyone that impresses her” Veronica insulted.

“I hear that tone in your voice veronica. It seems to me that you sound jealous…” Maria said

“I am okay with you and Lucy. pleasing each other all over...” Veronica retorted.

“I did not mean jealous of what is going on between me and Lucy.” Maria teased as she left.

Veronica sat in Maria’s room in the Lucky 38 thinking about her first meeting with the courier.

*Flashback*
“So, Veronica, ever been in love?” Maria asked.

“Ever been nosy?” Veronica teased. “I was once. We were young, but I’d like to think it was love”

“What happened?” Maria puzzled

“She left the brotherhood, since our group is not open to outsiders; some believe that obligates all to procreate. You can guess which side her parents were one.” Veronica answered curtly “I tried to convince her to stay, but she was just too stubborn.”

“Oh,” was all Maria Said.

“I still think about her, sometimes” veronica said.

“You know, ‘Ronnie, I am a lesbian as well” Maria told her

Veronica smiled at that.

*End Flashback*

She thought about Maria comforting her after she left the brotherhood.

*Flashback*
“This is entirely my fault. IF I hadn’t left, these people would not be….” Veronica said depressed.

Maria hugged her saying “There, there ‘Ronnie it is not your fault. Those idiots were being themselves.”

Veronica sobbed quietly to herself “Thanks Talon, I love you.”

*End flashback*

She was jealous, not of the relationship, but of Red Lucy herself. She had always hoped that it would be her under Maria, or as she preferred to be called, Talon, taking all the nips, licks and kisses her friend could give. She wanted to be the one to give the courier love, to make her happy, not that-that…whore. Okay, that maybe a bit too much even for a jealous Veronica. So she got up and left looking to tell Maria where feelings for her…
 
Indeed. Don't be afraid of taking your time. Create a scene, explain the characters.
Maybe start with Maria first meeting Veronica, and then it's something she said in their first conversation that Veronica just starts to be attracted to her.
Incorporate the stuff in the game with it. Like, use actual possible conversations, mixed with your own, and use the locations from "I could make you care" as markers in their travel. For example, they stop at Repconn HQ on their way to the Strip.
 
Don't let me tell you what to do, sorry. Um, it's your project, do it however it comes naturally to you. What I posted was just advice. Take it or leave it.
 
revised it, adding flashbacks to set the scene and add some information about Maria. during the story, will flesh out Maria's Character with them.

note in last flashback when Veronica muttered "I love you" under her breath, she meant it in an "i LOVE you" kind of way.

know you will want more info on Maria, so here. Maria was a soldier that nearly lost the use of her leg during her stint in the NCR army, while being tested to see if she can join the Rangers.
 
i may just change the whole thing later on, maybe make a twist where Maria is actually in love with a member of the followers (not arcade) and is mistakenly thinking her feelings are for veronica, with veronica discovering she has feelings for Cass instead of Maria.

ok, part 2 is here, but the plot changed: Veronica gets shot down in Chapter 2 because Maria actually takes Lucy to bed to gather the courage she needs to tell her real crush, Julie Farkas how she feels.

Chapter 2


Veronica got to the Thorn in time to listen in to Talon and Lucy. She heard them "making love" to each other. As Maria cried out her orgasm Veronica decided to wait, hoping Talon would not be mad at her.

*inside*
"Listen, Lucy, i think you are incredibly attractive but..." Maria started when Lucy interrupted.

"You still want that doctor girl to love you the way you love her" Lucy finished

"Yes, you are not mad, are you" Maria puzzled

"No, but you may want to set that scribe friend of yours straight" Luce answered
*outside*

Maria was puzzled, when she came outside she saw Veronica waiting for her.

"Veronica!? What are you doing here?!" Maria exclaimed in shock.

"Oh, I-uh-I, I need to tell you something" Veronica stammered. "Maria, I am in love with you. Whenever you leave to do it with Lucy I keep imagining that it is with me you are doing that stuff with."

"You…you have romantic feelings for me?" Maria asked.

Veronica nodded, scared.

"You could've told me when you first found out." Maria told her friend.

"Really, you mean that?!" Veronica excitedly puzzled

"Yeah, you could have. But, you are my friend, and I do not want to ruin that with a romantic relationship." Maria told her friend, hoping to let her down easy. "You understand 'Ronnie, right?"

Veronica had tears in her eyes. "Yeah, I understand."

As Veronica left, Maria felt hurt. Like back when she found out her girlfriend while she was in the NCR died:

*Flashback*
"What, did you say sir?" PV2. Gonzalez asked holding her left leg, which was injured during the battle of Hoover Dam.

"PVT. Morlan was killed in Action, Talon." General Oliver said.

"NOOOOOOO! She can't be, she just cant be!" Maria Screamed

"She is. Also due to your injury, both Hanlon and I feel that it is best if you are honorably Discharged" Oliver said

Maria looked at ranger Chief Hanlon who nodded and said "we have decided to make you an honorary ranger though"

*End Flashback*

Should she tell Veronica about her feeling for Jennifer Morris? would Veronica understand?
 
The_Noob said:
Y'know, I think this is beyond salvage.

this story was dumb, i thought that to but now it is set in stone as idiotic. i decided to make a new one, with a character list that will set up each character first before i make the story itself.

ignore this thread from now on.
 
i said to ignore this thread. plus she was going to be of the good alignment.

can a mod lock this before someone else posts in a dead story thread?
 
stonefire310 said:
i said to ignore this thread. plus she was going to be of the good alignment.

can a mod lock this before someone else posts in a dead story thread?

I just thought I might add a leaving comment.
 
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