Going home... eventually

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Will someone please tell me how to make a good ending to a fan fic, this is pathetic.

Well, here goes anyway:

The author reserves the right to yell at anyone who criticizes him. Author's name: William of the Order.

Going home… eventually
Warning: No main plot.

Flashes of colored light breaking through the darkness, mostly orange and red, music, laughter, a gunshot. This is a town that knows no law. Most of the buildings and streets are covered by the scary glow of the burning barrels and the few neon lights. Another gunshot. The crowd applauds as the lifeless body of the gambler, the cheating gambler, falls down to the earth. The people surround the shooter, the whores come out and offer him their services and the junkies, the junkies don't seem to realize what's going on.
The man, dressed in a sloppy travelers outfit, covered by a leather jacket, ignores the crowd, puts his head back over his dirty black hair and turns around, walking out of town. He has to stay clear of this town for a couple of weeks, so the relatives and friends of his victim can cool down and he won't have to fear for any acts of vengeance. As he walks out of town the children gather around the dead body, stealing from it. As a wise man once said: 'Hell doesn't always look like hell, on a good day, it can look a lot like New Reno.'
It started raining, nothing much, but pretty unusual for New California's climate. And before the rain washed away the bloodstain, the body was already taken to Golgotha, which would have to expand soon.
In the distance, to the south, two light appeared and grew. Soon one could recognize the sound of a car engine, a Corvega Highwayman V28 for the connoisseurs. Less than a minute later the vehicle pulled in the parking lot in Virgin street for caravans and cars, in front of the Cat's Paw. Instead of parking the vehicle in one of the designated squares, the driver parks his car diagonally between two rows, blocking the way for a merchant in his truck. The driver stepped out of the car. The merchant was just about to start insulting the driver, but then quickly swallowed his words, he didn't know this man, but did know his kind. The driver was dressed in a gray suit, complete with a necktie and everything and had a black trench coat hanging over his shoulders, his long brown hair was tied in a pony tail on the back of his head, clearly a mobster. The mobster took of his shaded glasses and put them in his pocket, then threw a burned up cigarette on the ground. The man was unarmed. As the mobster walked towards the parking lot's exit he heard someone call him, loud… and disrespectfully.
'He you! Yeah you, with the girlie hair, get that car out of the way!'
The mobster turned around to see who he was dealing with and saw a man in a leather jacket standing on top of his car, it was the man from the shoot out a couple of minutes ago, but the mobster didn't know that. Then he spoke with an Italian accent: 'And just who might you be?'
'I am the parking attendant, and you are bothering my customers.' The man answered smiling and pointing at the merchant.
'Am I bothering you?' The mobster asked looking at the merchant, who was using every symbol for no he knew while shaking his head nervously in the mean time. 'He says I'm not bothering him, but you, you are bothering me.' The mobster continued, signaling some thugs, who were perfect strangers to him. Three of them came forward, being more afraid of the mobster than the gunslinger. Immediately the man jumped behind the car, then jumped up again to fire his Desert Eagle, only to see a throwing knife separate his vision into two separate parts, then nothing. As the gunslinger dropped on the hood of the car, a knife sticking out of his forehead, the mobster turned around, padded one of the thugs on the shoulder and said: 'Thanks for the knife.' Then walked away, leaving them with their mouths wide open. The mobster walked along the streets, when he was interrupted… again! A drunk exiting the casino bumped into him and was just going to walk away. Quickly the mobster grabbed the drunk by his shoulder and turned him around.
'Do you have any idea at all who I am!?' the mobster asked irritated, yet calm.
The drunk, who was dressed in a dark bleu outfit, probably an uniform with parts of it just ripped of the sleeves, looked at him from behind his wet blond hair, which now covered his dark brown eyes. They seemed to look angry, annoyed at the very least, but the rest of the face just looked like any other drunk, so the mobster didn't take it as an offense, besides, he once knew someone with the same 'problem'. Looking carefully through his dirty, wet hair the drunk responded.
'Y-yes, To… Tony.'
The mobster was amazed, yet at the same time insulted and almost yelled: 'Anthony! Anthony Clerichuzzio! And who th…' A flash of recognition went through the mobster's eyes and from one moment to the other his accent just vanished, like snow in the desert. 'William?'
'Y-yes?'
'What the hell are you doing here!?'
'Dri… thinking.'
'How did you get here?'
'I fl… flew.'
'Sure you did, how much did you drink anyway?'
'25, maybe 26'
'It's a miracle you're still alive, I thought you didn't drink? Anyway, it looks like 25 is you lucky number. And let's get you some place to rest.'
'NO! I don't wanna rest! And you told me yourself that one is the loneliest number.' William answered hitting Anthony's arm away and sobering up a little.
'Ok then, come with me.' Anthony said and took William back into the casino. They sat down in a quiet corner of the casino and immediately a waiter showed up. Anthony ordered a can of coffee, despite of the angry, real, look from William and the surprised look on the waiter's face. The waiter left joking, saying that he would see if anyone still remembered how to make coffee.
'Why did you get back here.' Anthony started.
'I was going home but then I decided I needed to… think.'
'Sure you were, but why do you still call that place home? This is home.'
'Noh… Not anymore.'
'Ah, come on, what you do for them is basically the same as what you did for us. Where did you come from anyway.' Anthony said irritated.
'Classified.'
'Ah damn you! 25 drinks and still…'
'I had good news and bad news, the good news is classified and the bad new… is bad.'
William told Anthony about Henry's death and he now had to be the one to tell his mother, unless his father did that for him.

The images return, shimmering through the darkness. Vaguely he recognizes a bed in the darkness, he's on it, next to it he sees the dark contours of a man in a trench coat and with a hat on, standing in the door opening, looking at him. William, who was still dressed, a bad habit he picked up on missions, attempted to recognize the man, but came to the conclusion that he didn't know him. He head a headache and was dizzy. Suddenly the man reached under his raincoat, pulled out a pump shotgun and aimed it at Williams head. William quickly rolled to his right, of the bed, grabbing his 223. pistol of the cabinet next to the bed, then, as he hit the ground, he fired. The bullet entered the mans throat and went right passed his spine, shattering his air pipe, then left on the other side and impacted again in a wall across the door. In shock the man pulled the trigger on the shotgun and blew a big hole in the bed, on the spot William was just seconds ago, then dropped the shotgun and grabbed his own throat, as if that would help. Down the stairs William could hear the panicking voice of Anthony and then footsteps running up the stairs. Just as the man dropped to his knees, coughing up blood and blood gushing out of his throat underneath his hand, Anthony appeared behind the man in the door opening, a throwing knife ready. The man fell over and stopped coughing and William stepped over the body, looking around the door corners, still holding his 223.. With a dry voice he said to Anthony:
'Home, huh?' Then stepped back over the body, lifted the man's head by the hair and asked:
'Who is this, Anthony?' William usually only used Anthony's full name when angry or accusing him of something.
'I don't know.' Anthony answered, failing in his attempt to sound sincere.
'Well think, Anthony, who could he be!?' William said, clearly loosing his patience.
'Family.' Anthony answered with a cold tone in his voice.
'Why!?'
'I failed, I was supposed to set some examples and retrieve money, but one got away and now I'm accused of stealing the money he had for my own.'
'Did you?' William calmed down. 'If there's a way I can help you I will, but I can't kill any more family, unless in self defense, I'm still a member of the family myself.'
'Believe me, I didn't do it. If I could get this guy and the money I'd be allowed back. I was trying to find him when my car started acting weird and I had to come here. I heard he was seen in Modoc.

'You really need one, don't you kid?' The man asked. He was of a dark skintone and had gray, short hair with a beard, his wrinkles just vanished whenever he was talking about his work. His clothes were covered in grease and stains that were older than William himself.
'What does it look like T-ray? My friend and I need transportation and fast!' William answered, saying the obvious.
'I thought you already had 'transport', kid.' T-ray said with a mysterious tone in his voice and a conspiring look in his eyes.
'Transport yes, fuel no. I sent her back to NAR headquarters, with a message.'
T-ray and William had known each other for as long as William could remember. Anthony and William one day came across the chopshop in their childhood and almost immediately after that they had declared T-ray uncle T-ray, or at least, William did. William was sent back to the chopshop on several occasions after that, in the time he still worked actively for the Santadios, before they relocated their organization to the Hub.
'I know what your thinking, kid, those were the days, I'll see what I can get you.' and to Anthony T-ray said on a whispering tone: 'He never became a cop, did he? He knows more criminals than I do.'
'What are you whispering T-ray? Didn't your mother tell you that's rude.'
'Nothing, nothing. Just wait here.'
There they were, standing in 'uncle T-ray's' office, when Arthur came in, William never liked him. He looked around for a while and then asked: 'Does any of you know where the super toolkit is?'
'Not in here, through the door, second locker on your left.' William said, he had spend so much time in here he knew exactly where everything was. Arthur walked through the door, to the right, then stuck his head around the corner and said: 'He dipshit, there ain't no toolkit in here! What makes you think you can screw with me!?' giving William the finger.
After looking at Anthony, who got the message not to interfere, William went around the corner. Because of all the time William spend in New Reno with the families he would not allow anyone he doesn't know or like talk to him like that. He grabbed Arthur's arm, twisted it behind his back and slammed him with his face into a locker. He could hear the sound of Arthur's nose break and the metal locker dent, then let him go and watched him fall to the ground, covering his nose with his hands.
'That one, asshole.'
At the very moment William entered the office, the backdoor opened and T-ray signaled them to get over there. Behind the door was the chopshop junkyard and in the middle of an opening between the wreckages was a rusty highwayman. Two guards were by it.
'Consider this a loaner. I do want it back.' T-ray said. 'Mikey there stole it from the parking lot in just 13 minutes after I told him.' T-ray continued proud. Mikey was his son. 'Now, will you remember my request?'
'Don't worry about it T. I sent a message already. I'm sure someone will remind me.'
As they drove the car away from the chopshop Anthony asked: 'What was that all about?'
'Well.' William explained 'Now New Reno joined the republic the town is bound to be 'cleansed' a little. This way the mob and other criminals will be forced to bring certain parts of their businesses to the underground, something that never was necessary before. So T-ray wants to legalize his business a little by building cars out of salvaged wreckages and I'm to ask New Arroyo to drop any junk they don't need of at T-rays junkyard, free of charge. That's also a pretty good cover to continue stealing, hiding the stolen vehicles between the junk.'
'Anthony laughed. 'T-ray was right.'

The flickering light of the campfire played tricks with the shadows. William was sitting on the hood of the car with his legs crossed. William tried to meditate, something he tried to learn for years already, but always failed. When Anthony asked him why he did this the only response he ever got was, 'I'm trying to become invisible.' Something William once saw a hubologist do, until this day, even with training from spirituals from different cults, William never understood. Suddenly William slid of the car and looked into the darkness. His eyesight had always been above average, but he still hardly recognized Anthony outside the light of the fire, looking for anything that might burn.
'Who are we looking for anyway?' William spoke into the darkness and from the darkness Anthony's voice answered: 'Some guy named Sam or Samuel. He misses one hand from an earlier conflict with the Santadios, and he has a big S burned into his forehead. He says it stands for Samuel, but actually he got it from the family as well.'
William walked around the car to get his cleaning kit, to clean his 223., by lack of better things to do. As he stepped behind the car a man jumped up, nearly pushing his shotgun up William's nose. This man was clearly a farmer, but somehow William thought he wasn't quite as reasonable.
'Who are you? Who were you talking to!?' The man asked, moving the shotgun even closer to William's head. Suddenly William heard a 'tud' sound and the farmers eyes rolled up as he fell down. 'Me.' Anthony said, standing behind the man with a big rock in his hands.

They stopped on top of a hill at night. They could see Modoc in it's entire from up there. Modoc now was a medium sized town. Modoc had access to all the New Arroyan technologies, because unlike New Reno they didn't just join the republic, they allowed themselves to become a part of New Arroyo itself, kind of like a neighborhood, only with 200 miles between any of the others. The town still was as sleepy as could be expected from a farming community, even though the commercial area, where the bars were, was still busy. Most of the lights in the city were off, but in the outskirts of the town, where the farms were it still was light enough to make anyone think it daytime. The light came from the long glass structures, William didn't know what they were called only that it was an ancient invention used by one country in particular across the ocean, he didn't know which country either. The structures were capable of providing the plants inside with any desirable climate and because the lights were still on at night the plants continued growing, this way food could be grown for the republic at least 3 times faster than any normal farm. New plants were grown here and even though these structures wouldn't be a match for the biodome the Brotherhood was building at Oasis at the east coast, there were few travelers who had been to Modoc without noticing them.
'S-marking, missing left hand, named Samuel, right?' William asked.
'Yes, let's go.'

He ran and ran. He ran through 5 allays and if he could get back to the commercial area of town, they wouldn't be able to, or dare, to follow him. He stopped and looked behind him, no one there, he sat down and started laughing, or crying, who could tell. He looked and saw the guy in the raincoat come around the corner. By now he started to realize that this might very well be the only one after him. He pulled out a knife and the man got closer and closer, very slowly with his hands in his pockets, making him nervous. He dropped the knife and started running again, ran into another allay, knocking over garbage cans, barrels and boxes to block the way for the mobster. His gray hair was now dirty of sweat and his clothes were torn by nails and obstacles along the route. He could hear the music from the bars already as he bumped into a blond man, he was going to apologize and run on when the man grabbed him by his right arm and threw him into a wall. Then the man stepped up behind him, grabbed his arm again, twisted it behind his back and said: 'You have the ri… Oh, wait, I'm of duty, sorry.' Everything got black.

A woman screamed. William immediately jumped up, Anthony turned around a few times before saying: 'Eh, what?' He lifted his head to look around, then let it fall back on the pillow. Standing up from the chair, they tossed for the bed and William lost, since there was only one room free, William listened carefully to the sounds outside and said: 'Shh!' He could hear a man yell: 'Somebody get the sheriff, we got a stiff back here!' Looking through the window William could see a mass of people gathering around the allay and a few running towards the sheriff's office. William went downstairs and into the streets, even with his ID held high above his head he had a tough time getting through the crowd. As he finally got through he saw the sheriff already was there.
'Go get the coroner.' He said to one of the officers.
'What do you think, sheriff?' William asked.
'I think you should tell me what you are doing on this side of the line and who you are.'
William handed his ID to the sheriff. 'Lieutenant William Vangameren, New Arroyo Elites. I just happened to be in the neighborhood, a hotel less than 150 feet from here. And I assume you are Sheriff Parker?'
'Correct, how did you… never mind. I think this is a mob case. He was shot from very close, one of my deputies recognized one of the items he had as Samuel the Cleaner's. He used to have a cleaning business and it was rumored he also cleaned houses for the mob, guess in what way.'
'Can I see the items that were on the body.' William asked, putting his ID back in his pocket.
'You're looking for anything in particular?' The sheriff asked.
'No, just information. And a coroners report.' William answered, pointing at the body being carried away. The sheriff signaled one of his deputies to come and the deputy gave William a plastic bag.
To the deputy William said, taking a key out of the bag: 'Go find out what this key belongs to and bring it or what's inside here.' The sheriff was about to protest until William said: 'Please don't make me pull rank on you, sheriff, and let me do my work, then I'll let you do yours.'
The deputy left and fifteen minutes later he returned. 'The safe empty sir, someone even took the deposit box.'
'Damn, well sheriff, I want that report in two hours, then I go back.


'You! I thought I told you not to come back!' The man behind the desk, in his early forties, with his hair already entirely gray, said angrily. The man was hardly any longer than Anthony and was dressed in the same type of clothing, even though this man was dressed in black and didn't wear a jacket to match his suit.
'I'm sorry Padrino, you told me not to come back, unless…'
'He got you your money back and proved his innocence.' William said, finishing Anthony's sentence. He walked to the desk and threw the autopsy report on it, while Anthony placed an open safe deposit box next to it. The padrino glanced at the content of the box and nodded approvingly, then opened the autopsy report, studied some of the photographs and smiled at Anthony. 'Anthony'
'Yes Padrino?' Anthony answered hopeful. Seeing Anthony crawl for this man really made William sick, that too was one of the reasons he quit the family back then.
'Welcome back, Anthony.' And to the guards in the room he said: 'Go spread the word Anthony is back.
'Thank you, Padrino.' Anthony answered smiling and turned around to leave.
'And Anthony…' The padrino continued.
'Yes Padrino?'
'You're lucky you found him in New Reno and Matt tried to kill the wrong guy, I doubt you'd be standing here if he didn't.' The padrino said, waving his hand at Anthony, telling him to leave now.
That remark got William's attention and he asked: 'How did you know that.'
'You didn't think I would send just one man after a traitor, did you?.'
'I thought your father was still running the business here, Dante.' William said, on the cold tone mobsters are known for.
'I'll let you of this time, what are you implying?' Dante responded at the same tone.
'I just want to know what happened to him.' William said artificially innocent.
'Well, Croccifixio and I… retired him. Now I'm entitled to a question, where were you?'
'Classified' William moaned and turned around, then stopped in the door opening, looked back and said: 'Don't worry about your conscience, about your father I mean, I'm sure someone will someday do the same for you… maybe Anthony.'
'Probably' Was the only answer Dante gave, looking sad. As William walked down the hall he could hear Anthony assure his Padrino he would never do that. William felt the urge to spit as he even thought the word. He despised the Family, not for what they do to others, but each other, and still have the guts to compare their organization to a family.
As William walked into the streets of the Hub, which he had never seen before, he found it difficult to believe that this town was once trampled by a fleeing army of mutants, even including the fact that that was far over a century ago. It looked a bit like New Reno, but mobster had been forced to work in the underground ever since the town was founded. Cops were at every corner and even though everyone knows the families and gangs are there and what they do, no one can prove it. It is rumored on the streets that the families were going to bundle forces and overthrow the local government. William didn't find that hard to believe at all, since he knew the NCR was trying to get a grip on the Hub and that would be even worse for business. The New California Republic was trying to expand to the south, the same way New Arroyo was to the north, with vault 5 and the empty vault 7 a couple of years ago. Both NAR and NCR were currently in dispute over Navarro and now the Shi are trying to take it over as well. William wondered what would happen with the planned railroads from LA to the Hub, from the Hub to NCR, from NCR to San Francisco and New Reno, and finally from San Francisco and New Reno to New Arroyo. But it wasn't to important, New Arroyo can reach LA and San Francisco from the New Arroyo Harbor as well. Just as William had put these thoughts aside he heard a familiar voice, Dante's. 'William! Wait a minute.' William turned around and saw Dante coming after him.
'What is it?' William asked when Dante stood still.
'You're a patriot of some sorts, right?'
'Sort of, If anyone or thing close to me would benefit from your death…'
'Uhm, yes, see, we have a job for you, none of our men can do it, since most mobster don't care about not being seen.'
'It all depends.' William answered, realizing this could be important.
'We need someone to go to NCR and get a list of people we can't risk to bribe, you know, NCR spies and infiltrators. Then we can bribe whoever isn't on the list and expose those on the list to the inhabitants, so they'll lynch those bastards and presto, they'll need at least 20 years to get back where they were right now. You'll get to help the NAR to stay on top and the families will owe you, all of them.'
'All of them?' William asked, having trouble to believe this, even though he knew that in the Family lying was worse than killing your mother, because that would prove you can't be trusted.
'Big time.' Dante answered smiling.
'And how am I supposed to do this?' William asked.
'I'm sure there are a few people there who owe you a favor. You'll figure something. You kind of have the reputation of taking extra 'work' on missions.'
Failing in his attempt to look doubting William said: 'Ok, I'll do it.'

William arrived in NCR at noon and spent some time looking around the bazaar a little, he had bought some small energy cells for his shocker and laser whip, which he hardly ever used because of the fact that there was little ammo available for it. Besides, his favorite weapons were sniper rifles and small, easily to hide powerful weapons, preferable his 223., which used the same ammo as his sniper rifle, meaning he had to carry less around. At first William wanted to wait until night, but that would be stupid, cause the city itself is a public area, so it wouldn't be necessary. He was now wearing some clothes he bought of a merchant along the way to NCR, still his uniform, but a dark green shirt instead of his black one and a brown leather jacket instead of the dark blue one from his uniform. Also he had painted his hair brown with some stuff he bought from a gypsy traveling along with the caravan he met, after he dyed his hair she told him it would stay in for FOUR WEEKS! He was very, very close to attacking her when she told him, cause William actually thought it would was out, oh well. First he had to find a place where 'he could be during his absence' as he called it, or, just get an alibi. He decided to go to the bar in front of the gate. When he got there he saw that the bar's name had been painted over in white, except for the word 'bar'. On the inside it was pretty much the same, only all the photo's and painting on the wall had been removed and there was another bartender, a woman dressed completely in black leather. The only thing that hadn't changed at all where the clients. In the back, standing against the wall close to the tap, was a dirty traveler, with a hat on so big that the shadow covered his entire face and smoke came from beneath it. In the corner right of the door were three men discussing something very excited, they stopped talking as William passed them by and then continued their conversation. I the middle were to caravan guards in leather armor sitting across each other playing cards, both with a glass on their left and a hunting knife on their left. At the end of the bar was a scarcely dressed woman, probably in her late thirties looking at her drink and at the other end was some loser staring at her. William went over to the bar and immediately the young woman came over to him and said: 'Hello, I'm Sally, what can I do for you?'
'What happened to this bar? Eight months ago Leonard was still behind the bar, where is he?'
'Leonard, ehm, he doesn't own the bar anymore, he left, I don't know where.'
William leaned with his head on his arms and moaned softly: 'Damn, everything screws up, first the hair and now this, somebody please shoot me.'
Suddenly from the corner of his eye he saw the barrel of a desert eagle get way to close to his head and he heard someone say: 'Gladly stranger, gladly.'
Quickly William grabbed the weapon at the barrel and pulled it out of the man's hand, it was the same man that was smoking in the bar a minute ago. Immediately the man kicked the weapon out of his hands, then turned and kicked him with the other foot straight in the face, causing William to fall back against the bar. The man grabbed one of the knifes of the table of the two card players and stepped towards William, the suddenly said: 'Wi…?' He didn't finish the word, cause William grabbed a bottle of Rotgut from the bar and smashed it into his face, the man fell back to the ground, confused. William drew his 223. and stepped towards the man on the ground and shot, shooting right through the lower part of the man's pant's groin, the bullet impacting into the ground.
'Oops, the target must have been smaller than I thought.' William said smiling and continued on a slightly more serious tone. 'Your lucky I recognized you in time or you would have lost something very dear to you.'
The man who jumped up as the bullet almost separated him from his favorite body part, took of his hat and looked down as to check whether everything was still in place, then looked at William and said:
'Damn-it Will! Stop playing those stupid games!'
'He, you attacked me, so I figured I was entitled to have a little fun.'
'Well, I'm sorry. I thought you were send by the mob.'
'I am, but not for you. I'm going to need a place to stay during my absence. Remember you still owe me one.'
'Don't worry about it, you see those guys playing cards, you've played cards with them the whole evening, the short one's named Larry and the tall one is named Bernard, but his friends call him Berny. You got drunk and spent the night with Sally. Can you mimic a good hangover tomorrow?'

<< to be continued >>
 
Going home... eventually sequel

5 Liras on 37'
Getting in town was easy, just walked in. Once inside William immediately went to the weapons store and at the backdoor. Now to find out where to get what he was looking for.
'Wait a minute' a voice said from the other side of the door. After a minute or two the door opened. 'He'll be here as soon as possible, come in.'
The casino was still empty, it was an illegal casino like all the others and William wondered how many of these there would be in New Arroyo. In a cage in the northern corner of the room were two sparrows, very rare nowadays. Since most birds died during the holocaust and the first birds hadn't been spotted until 20 years ago, they had lived in places no human came. Time had passed slowly as one of the craps tables opened and a man came out. 'After you.' The man simply said, making an inviting gesture at the ladder on the inside of the table. Down the ladder was a small concrete bunker, probably a private bunker from before the war. Along the walls were mostly computers and in a back corner was a generator to supply them with the necessary power. Further there were some desks with papers on them and boards with papers pinned on them and a couple of filing cabinets. William whistled. 'Graham told me about this place, but it's still impressive.'
'Graham Fargo? From the NAE?' A gray man, probably closer to sixty even though he looked forty, asked as he appeared from behind a bookcase in the middle of the bunker.
'Hmm' William answered and nodded while still looking around.
'And you are?' The old man continued.
'Sent by the families.' William said, now studying the man. Except for the knife tucked in his left boot he was unarmed.
'Reno?' The man asked.
'The Hub.'
'Which ones?'
'All of them.'
The man whistled and continued. 'Keywords?'
William thought a while, then said: 'Pay list, spies and infiltrators, the Hub.'
'Payment?'
'Name it.'
The man typed the keywords in the computer and after hearing a couple of 'beeps' he turned to William and said: 'We don't have it, but I do know where it is. If I tell you so you can go and get it, will you bring me back something as well?'
'Sure, what do you need?'
'The list is in vault 15, I need you to copy the hard disk to this.' The old man said, holding up a more advanced version of the holodisk. 'Kenneth will come with you to copy the info, make sure he comes back or the deal is of.'
'Can't I do it mys…'
'No!'

One guard was dozing of while the other was still looking around like a watchdog. They didn't wear uniforms, but that was logical, cause even though everyone knew of vault 15's existence, NCR still considered that information Top Secret. The second guard suddenly stopped looking around and kept looking at the same spot, concentrating to see through the darkness. A young woman was washing herself in the creek. After assuring himself that his partner was vast asleep he smiled and walked slowly at the creek where the prostitute was washing herself. The guard had just sat down behind some bushes when suddenly a hand grabbed his forehead and pulled him back, immediately followed by a hand holding a jet canister that covered his mouth, immediately he dozed of into the wonderful world of drugs. William now sneaked at the sleeping guard and placed the canister before the sleeper's mouth, then dropped it next to him.
'What did you give them?' Kenneth asked, not knowing whether to look at William as he was taught to do when talking to people or look at the prostitute, who was convinced William was looking from the bushes and put up a whole show.
'I don't remember the full name, but it's some sort of jet I bought back in New Reno. Not very addictive, yet much safer and according to what I've heard much better. I'm almost sorry I have to leave it with that guard, I had to pay 725 dollar for it and I had some special discount. Oh, don't whisper anymore. There's no one out here anymore and we're not going to fight everyone inside or something like that.'
'Why didn't you just kill him.'
'This way they have a scandal, 2 addicted guards high on duty, can you see the headlines. If I would have killed them they had an incident, NCR officials killed by pro's, and NAR will be blamed. Now shut up or wait here, no more questions, okay?'
Kenneth nodded.

'He! Who are you!' A guard came at them.
'I'm Patrick, I'm a new recruit.' William said.
The guard started laughing incontrollable.
'What!?' William asked.
The guard, trying to calm down, said: 'Over… 30 years ago someone helped NCR to get his vault… by infiltrating the raiders gang in here, he said his name was…' the guard started laughing again 'Pat! A new recruit. If I were you I wouldn't be too surprised if someone made fun of you. Now, where's your ID?' The guard asked, still amused.
William panicked: 'ID? I need an ID!? No one told me anything a…'
'Calm down!' The guard said grinning. 'I was just teasing you. Go see the doc for a medical check up and then to level 2 to get instructed… Pat.'
They immediately went to the elevator. Once inside William saw that the elevator only went to level 2, level 3 required a special keycard. 'Can you hack that?' William asked Kenneth.
'No.'
'Well, at least you're honest.' William said pushing the second floor button, then when they were almost there he pushed the emergency stop. He open a hatch in the sealing of the elevator, climbed up and then reached out for Kenneth.
'Up there?' Kenneth asked shaky.
'No, down there, OK, Ken?'
'Kenneth!'
'Either way I wouldn't take to much pride in that name if I were you, sounds like a doll. Now, are you coming or what?'
'Somehow I always figured we'd be going down.'
'Some vault have been designed going up, like vault 13 and 15, cause they were build in mountains.' William said pulling Kenneth up. 'And that concludes today's history lesson.'

'What the…!?' The guard said before the bullet shot through the side of his head, shooting a big chunk out of the left side of his skull. William climbed into the door opening, Kenneth right behind him.
'Hurry, Kenny.'
'Kenneth!'
'Whatever, hurry, this place will be crawling with guards soon.'
That proved to be wrong, on the entire level were 2 more guards and over 20 scientists. Kenneth activated a base wide fire alarm. All the scientists and the two guards ran to the elevator. William had closed the doors and they had hidden the body complete with the separate parts in the storage room, where they saw some junk, barrels, crates and some gas tanks. Once the scientists had left they ran to the computer room where Kenneth started to, or more like tried to, copy the info to the holodisk.
'Oh Shit!'
William moaned, it had become a second nature by now. 'Oh shit what!?'
'This is copy-protected software, it will take at least 2 hours to override it.'
'I don't know how much time you've got, but in my plan I only have 2 more minutes!' William said angrily, opening the side of the computer. 'Here, is that the hard disk?' He asked.
'Yeah, but…' Kenneth was going to protest, but William ripped out the hard disk, which was only held in place by some cables. Immediately all the light in the base went out and after a couple of seconds the secondary computer kicked in and emergency lighting went on. William put the hard disk in a small backpack which was sown in on the inside of his jacket and they ran towards the elevator. Then William stopped at the storage room and went inside. He turned open a faucet on top of one of the tanks and one belong, the held the barrel of his 223. in the stream of gas coming out the top and fired. The small flame at the end of the barrel was enough to ignite the gas, but the tank didn't blow.
'What did you do?' Kenneth asked as they continued to the elevator.
'Something I remembered from third grade chemistry. Gas burns at the top and oxygen goes in at the bottom and when the mixture of gas and oxygen in the tank is optimal the whole thing blows, all the gas at the same time. Judging by the size of the tank we have about 10 minutes, give or take a few, it's a timed bomb and this way no one will ever find the bullets in the guard, he'll be to badly burned.'
At the elevator shaft they looked down and saw the elevator come up.
'Careful now, when the elevator's roof is leveled with this floor step on it without making sound and lay down or you'll be crushed against the sealing.'
The stepped on it and then the elevator stopped at level 3. William could hear two guards get out the elevator. He opened the hatch and lowered himself through it, followed by Kenneth, then pushed 1.
Not much later the doors opened again and what they saw was chaos, absolute chaos. These guards didn't know what to do in case of an emergency. Some were prudent enough to carry explosives, ammo and other easily ignitable equipment outside, William followed Kenneth's example and picked up some explosives and when to the other elevator. Once outside they could see the two guards trying to explain why they were high to their superiors. One of the officers looked up from the stoned guards, looked around and then looked at William and Kenneth. William was ready to grab his 223. while the officer came at then, then he said: 'You two!'
'Sir!' William answered saluting in the way the NCR army does, left hand at the side of his head.
'Oh finally, some trained soldiers!' The man said looking relieved. 'Go see what's taking the local fire department so long, then report back to me.'
'Yes, sir.' Both answered turning around running into town.
They weren't even at the car yet when they heard the sound of a large explosion, followed by a seemingly endless concert of smaller ones, rolling through the sky like thunder and the ground shivered. The people of the squat came out of their houses to see the fire rise from the ridge through the vault's airvents.


'And it really was a beautiful girl. With long blond hair and blue eyes. And on day she was walking in the forest when suddenly a little fairy sat down on her shoulder and asked with a very low voice: 'He little girl, where are you going!?' And the little girl answered with her very high voice: 'I'm going to the house of the seven Negroes, to find out what love is. Now get lost asshole!' So she walked on and then got to the seven Negroes' house and she went inside. Inside were the Negroes with nothing on except their boxer shorts, then one of them asked: 'Do you want some tea?'
The girl stepped on a table, pulled up her skirt and said: 'I wanna know what love is!' The Negroes panicked and immediately they all ran out the door, followed by the girl shouting: 'Losers! Sissies!'
They ran and ran for days all the way to Texas and the girl was still following them, and then, fate struck as the girl jumped over a fallen tree and landed with her foot in a Gecko trap. The trap closed and took her leg of. And the girl fell, bleeding from the immense wound. The youngest Negro stopped and went back at the girl and said: 'Oh my God, lay still, I'll go get help.'
'No!' The girl said 'It's to late, but will you do me one favor? One last favor.'
'Sure, sure, anything you want.' The youngest Negro said.
'Please, don't let me die as a virgin.' The girl begged.
'But… but… I can't…'
'Please' The girl begged. So the young one honored her last request and took her virginity as tender and loving as he could. And at his last thrust the girl blew out her last breath. And as he stood up and turned around he looked straight down the double barrels of the hunter's hunting rifle.
NOW TRY TO EXPLAIN THAT!'
The crowd started laughing and after waiting for a minute for the crowd to calm down, and the people to stop explaining it to the others, the comedian started his next story. In one corner of the establishment was a blond uniformed man, William, talking to one of his local informers, and old friends.
'He's good.' The informant dressed in the sloppy clothes one could expect from a dealer said to William. 'As true as my name is Jagged Jimmy Junior, he's good.'
'Well, at least he beats that guy that was performing when I left. What happened to him?'
'Oh, he had an accident, during his act. He was joking about some gunslinger and he didn't take that lightly. Oh, have you heard, the Santadios have send back some gangsters to reestablish their influence in New Reno. Some guy named Clerichuzzio leads them, they mostly do insurances. It is said that they have a little base in the devastated parts of town, you know, the original Reno. Oh, I also heard something about the Hub becoming like New Reno a couple a years ago, so a lot of people are going to be moving.'

'I don't care, old man. You will pay, one way or the other. I don't think mister Santadio will be to happy if you don't pay or even care about your current situation.'
'I told you I don't have it, and I hope your conscience eats you about what you're going to do and to who you do it.' T-ray answered.
'OK, old man, that's it.' The mobster lifted a heavy metal pipe to hit T-ray with it, when a voice sounded from the garage doors. 'Drop it Anthony!' William said pointing his 223. at him.
'Ah, William, I see your back in uniform again.' Anthony said tapping on his sleeve, than holding his hand up in a Nazi greeting. His 3 gangster laughed. Suddenly a shot sounded through the chopshop and Anthony dropped the metal pipe, to grab his injured hand. As he looked at it he could see right through it, there was a perfectly round hole in his hand. 'You know how I feel about that, Anthony. I dare you to do that with your other hand now.' Anthony looked up from his hand, rage rushing through his veins, only keeping the illusion of calmness, which was very important to him. 'Why?'
'Let's just say that I now know who and WHAT you are. You crawl for Dante. You crawl for the family.' William spat. 'And most of all, you crawl for the power, the power your position gives you. But I, Anthony, I have just proven you that with all that power, your not God.'
'Yet.' Anthony responded coldly and then continued to the other gangsters, who had their weapons ready: 'Kill him! Kill the old man.' The mobsters looked around and one of them said: 'What old man. He got away.'
'You! You!' Anthony shouted, pointing his shaking finger at William.
'Consider me disavowed, Anthony. Tell Dante he can repay his debt by simply leaving T-ray and preferably the rest of New Reno alone. And tell him there isn't the slightest chance of me coming back, next time you'll see me Anthony, it will be the last time that one of us sees.'
'I can't disavow you!' Anthony said with a hint of Triumph in his voice. Two gunshots. One of the mobsters fell to the ground, bloody holes where the eyes used to be. 'And now?' William asked, taking Anthony's self-discipline to the limit. Anthony just walked out the chopshop, passing William on a few feet distance, followed by two nervous gangsters. As the gangster disappeared in the ruined city blocks William walked to the center of the workshop, loading 3 new bullets in his 223. pistol.
'Eh! T-ray! Hello! It's me… William.' Suddenly a door flew open, in a reflex William turned around, aiming his weapon at the door, T-ray. T-ray was standing in the opening with a grease gun. 'Relax T, they're gone.'
'I heard shooting and came back' T-ray said, then when he saw the dead mobster. 'I can see how good this NAE sniper training is. What were you doing here anyway? You could have gotten us all killed!'
'What the fuck!? What did you think Anthony was going to do.' William bounced back insulted. 'I came here to bring back that damn car of yours!' He continued, throwing the keys on the ground in front of T-ray. 'I've been right all along, haven't I!? This isn't home anymore, I don't fit in here anymore.'
William said, putting his 223. back in his shoulder holster.

The desert bunny turned over and over above the fire. It was already half eaten and all he could think of was that he one day really had to go at his mothers place, cause his own cooking was horrible. It was only a 3 days walk to New Arroyo from here. William wasn't worried about what to tell his mother anymore, since he got a message from his father a couple of weeks ago, saying that he already 'informed' his mother as he put it. William grew up without knowing his father's name and never knew until his mother moved to New Arroyo, so basically, William only knew his last name and family history for 4 years now. He moved to New Arroyo at the age of 22. William heard some rumors of his mother having been a prostitute and his father on a mission when William was conceived, he never believed this. Something William did tend to believe were the rumors of William getting his rank because his father being general Richard W. Vangameren, in charge of NARSA, the New Arroyo Republic Security Agency, with close ties to general Narg, in charge of the NAE and the republic's army. He did know that he is more qualified that most other lieutenants, so it doesn't really matter that much.
Something disturbed William's thoughts, he listened carefully, another gunshot, not far away. He climbed up a hill in the direction the sound came from, then almost at the top he dropped to the ground and crawled the rest, his hand very close to his weapon. As he looked down from the hill, he could see the source of the gunfire. It was an old farm under siege by a group of raiders of unusual size. 20 raiders, to little for a group that specializes on sieges and to big to be a regular raider party. They must have lost men during last siege. Half of the group was shooting at the farm, the windows, and the rest was ruthlessly slaughtering the animals, the Brahmin and dogs. Defending the farm were a farmer with a shotgun and his son with a pipe rifle a few windows away, on the inside William could hear a woman trying to comfort a little crying girl. Someone screamed, a raider fell back, bleeding from a large chest wound obviously caused by a shotgun. Immediately the raiders got more aggressive and those slaughtering the animals now joined the attacking group. William set his pipboy to send out a distress call, to any New Arroyo patrol, rangers or anyone else capable of receiving the message, then dropped it on the top of the hill and ran down. At the foot of the hill was a lone raider, sitting kneeled behind a tree, William stopped behind him and whispered in his ear: 'Do you think anyone would notice a gunshot more or less?'
'No, why?' the raider answered, turning around to see who he was talking to, which in this case turned out to be the wrong end of the barrel of a 223. pistol. For a moment a flash of panic went through the man's eyes, immediately followed by an explosion. For a fraction of a second the raider could feel the heat, the fire from the barrel lick his face and at the same time a flash of pain as the bullet entered his forehead, shattering the skull. It was to short to remember, but somehow he did feel it before the darkness descended over his eyes. William stood up and turned towards the other raiders, 18, and saw another raider looking his way, immediately he lifted his 223. and shot. He missed! He hit and killed the raider behind the one he was aiming for. He shot again and the raider who looked his way died, but already warned the others, who now were all looking at him, with a few exceptions. William could see the weapons being aimed at him, still confused by the fact that he missed he dropped himself and rolled behind a tree. He could hear two raiders scream, they probably were distracted so much by him that the farmer and his son had a clear shot at them, that makes 6 down… and 14 to go.
14! The first thing that went through William's mind as he realized how many was: I'm gonna die! He held his weapon around the corner of the tree and fired twice, he could hear someone scream and fall. Then he came out of his hideout and saw a raider standing next to a dead raider, he was hit once in the heart area and once in the stomach, the two had so many resemblances they'd almost have to be family of one another. The alive raider took two death defying steps towards William, who lifted his gun and pulled the trigger, at the same time realizing that he didn't reload in his confusion. We raider smiled and signaled some other raiders to come, as they approached William could see projectiles fly through the air, seconds later the farm was covered by fire, Molotov cocktails! 'He guys, listen, I always wanted to say these lines.' The raider said to the others, pulling out his one hand weapon, a colt 45. and aiming it at William. 'Okay, here goes. Ahem.' Looking at William he continued 'At times like these you've got to ask yourself, do I feel lucky? Well, do ya, punk!?' They all started laughing and looking over the man's shoulder William said: 'Very funny, and to answer your question, yes.'
'What the… You don't expect me to fall for th…' A bullet exited through the man's forehead, blood splattered all over William and the two other raiders, who where looking around panicking. Quickly William put 4 bullets in his 223. as it became painfully clear to him that that was all he had left, mumbling: 'If I get some strange sickness because of that blood, I'll kill that sniper.' When William stood up and looked for target's it was already to late, all the raiders were dead and a patrol team came down the hill, all of them with sniper rifles on their back and one of them holding William's pipboy. Looking around William saw the boy, his mother and sister, around his father's dead body, lying in front of the burning far, they most have shot they when he tried to escape the fire.
Two soldiers went to the farm and it's inhabitants to help, the soldier with William's pipboy came forward, handed him the pipboy and said: 'Here you go, are you Okay?' After seeing William's stripes he added: 'Sir.'
'Don't worry, private. None of this blood is mine. Who shot him?' William asked pointing at the farmer.
'He did, sir.' The soldier answered, pointing at one raider. The man was still alive, twisting and turning all the time! He was shot in the stomach. 'I figured he didn't deserve any better treatment, sir.'
William smiled sadistically. 'Good thinking, now where is your commanding officer?'
'Back at the camp, sir. We were sent without commander. Please don't blame him, sir, he didn't know there would be so many raiders.' Quickly changing the subject he asked: 'Do you need a ride, sir?'

New Arroyo. A large city, even compared to prewar standards, fully surrounded by walls. One gate only for inhabitants and visitors for the inner city, another one for military personnel and many smaller ones for the inhabitants and visitors of the outer city, the slums. The one gate was a straight route to the inner city, isolated from the other parts of town, which were mostly cult territory. There were 3 big cults in New Arroyo and a whole load of smaller ones. Two known cults, remnants of old cults, The Children of the Cathedral and the Hubologists, with their bible starting with: 'We are the wheel. It is the Hub.' A flavor text from a Tragic card, not making them any more credible. And then there was the third cult, consisting of Arroyans that still worship the Vaultdweller. Then there are the Cult hunters, who have made it their calling to destroy everything that has to do with religion, including those who practice it. Because of that and the fact that separate cults often have 'disputes' the inner city had been declared cult free. Any cult members who walk in cult colors or special clothing, or practice their religion in this part, are thrown in jail for 3 weeks without a trial. To allow those living in the inner city to practice religion a special part of the inner city had been surrounded by extra walls. It was patrolled even more than the inner city itself and weapons weren't allowed inside that area. How could you expect the G.E.C.K. to create Eden, if Adam and Eve won't cooperate!? High above New Arroyo rose the Council hall, a 7 floors high building where the president lived and the senate held meetings. But above that rose Tranquility Tower, almost 300 feet high, the home of the republic's ministry of defense, the NAE and the NARSA. They arrived at the military gate, the guard saluted and signaled two others to escort William to 'his chambers', an expression William found very funny, and anyone would if they would see William's 'chambers'. William was given 30 minutes to was away the blood and change into a new uniform, he was expected in the de-briefing room. 30 minutes later William entered the de-briefing room, to see his father there instead of his commander who he expected, or at most his own general, Narg. William waited for the general to turn around.
'Lieutenant.'
'Sir.' William saluted.
'I requested to de-brief you, any objections?'
'No, sir.'
William was asked to describe and explain everything, everything he saw on the east coast. From Last Stop, to Amityville, to the Brotherhood's outpost. From the crash, to the traitors and geography. About Synthia, the Cargo/Passenger version of the Aurora. And why it took him so long to get back, even with an aircraft capable of supersonic speeds. Why the Aurora returned 2 months before he did. William response to this was that he just took some days of, he still had 2 months of free days left. The entire de-briefing took over 2 hours.
'Ok, now we've got that over with, I'm reassigning you to Urban Ops. I'm assigning you to the morning shift, that leaves only 3 hours before you get of. Go patrol or something. Don't go visit your mother yet, all in time, I just told her the details yesterday and she is still pretty upset.'
'Thanks.' Was all William answered, during the de-briefing the formalities just kind of got lost.
'Oh, and William?'
'Yes?'
'You've got blood in your hair.' His father said. A bit of blood was still in his hair, just above his right eyebrow, hardly noticeable.
William smiled. 'Leave it, I don't have time for that now.'
As William left the de-briefing room he nearly bumped into another lieutenant. The man had red hair and was almost 6 foot 8', 2 meters, and had very light blue eyes, a scary combination.
'Xander!' William said surprised. Xander was related to Hakunin, the shaman during the time of the Chosen One, a nephew or something. He had a twin brother and he was the lucky one of the two, his parents named him Xander, and his brother Broc. 'They didn't kick you out yet?'
'No, worse, they put me on patrol.' Xander said trying to look sad. 'And I'm surprised you remember.'
'Surprised? You shot me in the back 3 times! You can still see the marks! I hope they took away your gun or at least gave you some lessons.' William said, ducking to avoid a punch.
'Ha ha! Very funny. So, what are you doing here anyway, you've been gone so long I figured you lived in the wastes.' Xander said.
'I've got to do one more shift and then it's weekend for me. 3 hours. Perhaps I can go with you, than you could fill me in of everything what happened in the last 4 months.'
'Sure, but ehm, you've got blood in your hair.'
'OK! OK! I'll clean it already, no more!'

<< to be continued >>
 
Going home... eventually, the End

The inner city was impressive. All the buildings were clean and white, with the most amazing designs, not just the standard NCR building. In the middle was the park and the museums, dedicated entirely to the Vaultdweller and the Chosen One. You could see some of the building of the outer city sticking a few feet up over the walls. They were mostly deteriorated versions of the buildings in the inner city, cause a couple of years ago the senate convinced the president to cut the outer city of from all public services. If the fire department wouldn't put out fires cause by the cult wars and the buildings weren't repaired, the violence would diminish. However, fires weren't to rare and at the very moment they could see smoke coming from behind the wall. Xander told William everything he knew of what happened the last few months. The Hubologists had requested permission to build a spaceship, either outside of town or in Navarro, which didn't officially belong to the NAR. The Children from the Cathedral were dropping like flies, cause they tried to recreate the FEV toxin, however had not a single clue on it's chemical composition, so usually ended up taking in poison. As for the Followers of the Vaultdweller, they were known for their collective suicides, and they often tried to have someone died and than revive him, or try to keep him at the edge of death, so they could communicate with the Vaultdweller. After the Family, William hated the cults second, first behind the Family was his own cooking. They had been patrolling for over an hour now when they suddenly heard someone shout:
'Get these people out of here! Secure the area and don't go inside! I want this entire block evacuated in 5 minutes! And someone go warn the bomb squad and the fire department.'
The shouting man was dressed like a civilian, probably 50 years old, but obviously in the military, at least judging by the way he was talking to some of the guards. William and Xander ran to the man.
'What's going on here?' was the first and best question William could come up with, immediately followed by: 'And who are you?'
'Colonel Decker for you. It's those damned Vaultdweller worshipping idiots again! After last time we're not taking any chances. I personally hope each and every one of them burns in hell for ruining my vacation.' The gray haired man said making all sorts of symbol and gestures with his arms.
'What happened last time, and how did they get here… Sir.'
'I'm on vacation, you moron, call me sir again and I'll degrade you to corporal. Last time they committed suicide by a home made poison, so everybody stormed in the place when one of the guards saw that the cups from which they wanted us to think they drank, were still full. They had spread the poison by air, by boiling it or something, anyway, the men dropped like flies. As for how they got here, I guess the sewers.'
William nodded, then called on of the guards. The guard came at them and asked: 'Yes, sir?'
'Arrest this man.' William said pointing at the colonel and then turned to him: 'Do your homework next time, will you? The New Arroyo military organizations don't use the rank of corporal.'
'Xander, you see to it that the colonel gets a nice cell.' Then William pointed out 3 guards. 'You, you and you. Come with me.' He said, lifting the cover of the sewers of the ground and climbing down.
The sewers were build out of normal bricks and weren't used. These sewers were build as a backup for the modern version, which in fact was much smaller. Even though the were never used they smelled musty and because of the humidity level the walls were covered with fungus. Not to mention how dark it was, even though darkness usually was more of a blessing than a curse to William.
After walking through the sewers for 15 minutes William said to the guard nearest to him: 'Next time I have one of my great ideas, please shoot me, this place gives me the creeps.' The guard simply smiled and nodded, then repeated the procedure the followed every time they came at a junction. William stood with his back against the corner, the guard he was talking to stood on the other side of the tunnel and the two other ran around the corner, using the flashlights on their combat shotguns to see. 'Nothing sir.'
'There is a large room 200 meters that way, sir.' Another guard said, looking at his pipboy and pointing in the tunnel the other two were in.
'200 meters?' William asked? '600 feet.' The guard answered.
'Okay, let's go, if there's nothing there we're going back.' William said, checking his ammo again. The thought of forgetting to reload, like last time, or not being able to, made him uncertain of himself. It nearly got him killed last time. There were no other junctions along the way and soon they came at the room the guard saw on his pipboy. As William looked around the corner he could see ten cult members standing around the dead body of another member, a young woman. One of the guards stepped around the corner and said: 'Everybody on the ground. You are in direct viola… huh? Heh! get back here.' Immediately William and the other guards followed the cult members, who went through a metal door. On the other side of the door were dozens of people cheerfully talking, laughing, drinking and gambling, it was an illegal casino. The guards wanted to slow down, but eventually decided to follow William anyway through the back door of the casino. The stormed into the sewers again and saw the cult members go left. I had it with these guys went through William's head, followed by two shots from his 223. and two of the cult members fell. One of them was hit in the lower part of the leg and the other in the knee cap, causing his leg to twist in a very painful way. Neither one of them stood up. When they came around the corner they saw the tunnel was a dead end, however, there were 8 bodies lying one the ground. The cult members. William lifted one of the bodies' head and an empty capsule fell out of his mouth. 'Suicide pills! They killed themselves. You can't deal with religious fanatics.' William said, amazed by something he couldn't identify, was it loyalty or stupidity?
'This one is still alive, sir!' one of the guards said, pointing at the cult member who got shot in the knee cap and passed out to soon to be able to bite through the capsule.
'Take him to the sickbay at Tranquility Tower, or to the hospital and guard him.'
Two guards left, using a ladder and carefully pulling the cult member up, leaving William and the guard with the pipboy with the nine dead bodies.
'Let's go take a look in that casino.' William said and walked back into the casino a few seconds later the guard came. The casino was completely empty. There was no one there, besides some stuffed animals along the walls, and in Williams personal opinion, they didn't count. Most of the smaller things, like small slot machines and the fiches had been taken along. The guard had just marked the location on his map so the casino could be cleaned out, when they heard someone come down a ladder. In the corner of the casino was a ladder and a funny looking and very short man climbed down it. William walked at the ladder and stopped right behind the little man. When the little guy stepped of the ladder and turned around his eyes got big and the only thing he said was: 'Oh shit!' Then he tried to climb up the ladder again, but William grabbed him in the neck of his jacket, pulled him of and pushed him towards the guard, who immediately started asking questions to the little man, name, age, address, etc, etc.

His shift was over. After his work William immediately 'proceeded to his chambers' as the guard at the entrance advised him to do. Once inside he hung his jacket over a chair, put his gun in the gun rack on inside of his closet and lied down on his bed. 5 minutes later, he was bored already. Home at last.

So, any critisism is welcome (what am I saying, read the first line, and don't take it to seriously)

Let's see if I can get the Going home... eventually.doc up here. Nope, perhaps as text, but still, 92k is to big. tough luck.
 
GREAT STORY !!!

I think that is the longest story here. I didn't really understand anything past chapter 10 though. Is that story connected to this one? Well anyway I think chapters 1 through 10 was the best story I’ve seen. I may be repetitive, but that was an IMMACULATE, SUPERB, EXCELNT, and FLAWLESS! I have run out of synonyms. I don’t know why anyone else HASN’T posted about its greatness. It’s HUGE! And no, I am not William in another sign in name. I CAN’T WAIT TILL YOU POST ANOTHER STORY, WILLIAM.
 
RE: GREAT STORY !!!

Whoops my computer screwed up and stopped loading the webpage after chapter 10, so i thought this story was the conclusion to "east coast story. That's why I said that this didn't make sense. So when i said i didn't understand why anybody else didn't post about his great story, I was wrong cause their comments were after chapter 10. Sorry
 
REWilliam, I commend you!

Well Willy you did real good. Your character might use a little more developement! But that is okay. Now remember one thing William. I dont give a shit about your Order or anything else, so you better play nice with all the other members! I do not dislike you and I honestly respect you for the story you have written. But If you cannot be nice then I will have to turn you out to the mutants!


This will be your one and FINAL warning!

Mr_Teaky
 
RE: Well thats your choice

I am not harassing, nor spamming, nor insulting; I am just keeping the board in a orderly fashion! I dont understand Jim Bob why you must harass me?
 
I don't care what you say...

And quite frankly I don't understand it either. Do you really think that was serious!? No, I'm pissed. What I am saying is that GH...E SUCKS! I WROTE IT AND IT IS UP TO ME TO DECIDE WHAT IT IS OR DOES! Now, I doubt you turning me over to TMA (that was you meant, wasn't you?) would have much effect. I'm trying to have this story buried and, hate to do this but by replying to this I'm bringing it back up.

ANY MODERATOR ON THE BOARD! PLEASE REMOVE THIS TOPIC!

http://theorder.vault13.net/images/avatars/WilliAvatar2.jpg

I'm with The Order... so what?
 
RE: I don't care what you say...

mr_teaky was banned a few days ago
talk to shadowman, he`ll probably help you



"shichisho hokoku"
 
RE: I don't care what you say...

I think you should realize William, that posting here invites feedback on your work, if you are too insecure to take constructive criticism, then you should not post your work here, this is a forum for writers, to entertain, and to learn. You should really not be freaking out like this.


"I am the bringer of death, and the cry of sorrow, I am the one who... ah hell, I broke a nail."
 
RE: I don't care what you say...

he`s complaining the fact that this is a very old post that should be kept in it`s eternal rest. he´s the author, i really think he has that right

"shichisho hokoku"
 
RE: I don't care what you say...

[font size=1" color="#FF0000]LAST EDITED ON Oct-26-00 AT 11:04PM (GMT)[p]Hehe, I know that replying again will piss of william by keeping this thread in the new, but this whole thread brings up a very important question. When we post here, does it stay as our property? I mean, of course we own what we wrote, but the work posted here might be a different matter, quite frankly, it should be made clear what claims NMA hold on anything posted on their boards. Any moderators (or should I say, any shadowman's :) ) wanna comment on this?


"I am the bringer of death, and the cry of sorrow, I am the one who... ah hell, I broke a nail."
 
Y'r right, you do piss me off.

But I'm relaxed now... I got a new supply... lang leve Holland... Anyways, I'm just gonna forget about it. I don't have problems with the critizism, but indeed (as said) the fact that the fan-fic, the worst one I ever wrote is being brought up here. But, I don't care anymore, I'm seriously considering to limiting myself to The Order when it comes to publishing Fan-fics, and maybe my own website. That way at least I keep the copyrights.

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Well

Allthough in general posts made on these messageboards are public property we don't want to deny people their copyrights. However, marking it copyrighted is your own responsibillity. Also, if you want to have a story removed from this board all you have to do is ask.

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"The best trick the devil ever pulled was convincing the world he doesn't exist."
 
RE: Well

Thanks for clearing that up.


"I am the bringer of death, and the cry of sorrow, I am the one who... ah hell, I broke a nail."
 
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