Mark's Tale.

7ycell

First time out of the vault
Another shot richocheyd off the wall, francine ducked behind a metal barrle, I was already prone behind a robot recharge pad. I stood up and began laying into the security bots with my Assault Rifle, Francine kicked herself up from behind the barrle and opened up on the bots with her sniper rifle. I ducked down to reload my clip, to my horror I watched as a round met Francines head, Head against lead, Lead won. Francines corpse fell to the floor, her grey matter leaking out over the metalic flooring.

"DAMNIT!" I cired as I jumped up again my gun reloaded, I managed to add a few extra ventalation holes into the bodys of the remaining two bots, they fell. Harold stood up from behind the crate he was next to and reloaded his weapon, Grey was close by.

We all looked at Francines body as it lay there motionless, leaking. One of the security bots must have been hanging on by a thread because the next thing I remeber is a gunshot and a massive pain in my side.

I clasped My stomache tight, blood was slowly trickling out of the wound just above my pelvis on the left side. The security bot had got off a lucky shot that had passed through my leather armour. I was in pretty bad shape. Harold span around and finished off the already near death security bot, he walked over to me and helped me to my feet.

"Your in bad shape mark, head on back to the surface, me and Grey will meet you there once we have stopped the source of these damn muties."

I nodded and began stubmbling back towards the eleveator I took one last look behind me and watched Harold and Grey proceed further into the complex. Man this place was filled with technology, mutants and hostile security robots too.

I stumbled into the elevator and pressed the button for the ground floor. As the elevator hummed into action I lent against the wall, holstering my Assault Rifle in the custom harness I had build for it thay lay over my stomache I reached into my backpack and pulled out my last Stimpack. Ramming the needle into my stomache I watched as the strange red liquid depleted itself into my gut.

Almost immedialty I felt much better, regaining some of my sences I hit the emergency stop button on the lift. The lift grinded to a halt between floor 1 and 2. I slid to the floor and swung my backpack around to my side, reaching into it I pulled out my medkit. I had almost immediatly realised that the wound on my stomache would need more than a few stimpacks to heal up. I spent about five minuets in the lift applying a good temporary feild dressing.

I stood up again, the stimpack had taken full effect and I was feeling strong enough to make my way out of this abandoned technological monolith. I unpulled the emergency stop button from the lift pannle and the life hummed back into action. Soon I was on the ground floor. Straigh ahead of me lay Lassars body, a giant creature of some kind had got him while she was trying to disable the force feild emmiter. Poor basterd, the top hald of her still lay on the other side of the active green force feild a trail of blood no doubt lead to the remains of her legs and pelvis.

Grey had tryed to shoot the mutated beast before it could make off, the shotgun shots littered all over the wall were testament to the creatures agility. Harold and I had not seen the creature as we were still dealing with the last of the rad scorpions. Grey had discribed the creature to be some kind of mutated lizzard with massive hand like claws.

When Lassar got killed she took our only means of disabling force feilds with her. We had had to make our way around through the small gaurd quaters a bit further down. The quaters were relativly safe, the only inhabitants were bunks and lockers, all empty. The room after that however had been the security bot room. This was the room I now stood in, I limped my way towards the exit, my Assault rifle firmly gripped by both hands. I reached the main door, natural light streamed through the open blast door that was jammed open by a metal pole Francine had found outside.

Just as I was taking the final steps out of the base I heard a noise behing me. I span around, my eyes widened as I recognised the monster, I had heard stories of beast such at this but I never though I would come face to face with a Death Claw. The beast stood ten foot tall and its hands were easyily the size of my chest.

The monster had blood all over its face and claws and what appeared to be a peice of Lassars clothing lodged in its mouth. The images of Lassars upper hald flashed through my mind. almost as a natural reaction I raised my Assault Rifle and began shooting. The huge monster leapt fowards with shocking speed for its size I was half way through taking a step backwards when it landed on me. The next part got a little blurry but I remember staggering away afterwards a massive gash in my back and side. The monster was dead as far as I could tell, I had not stopped stabbing it with my knife until its blood splashed up onto my face with each thrust.

I managed to make it to one of our bramin that we had dragging the carts, I must of uncliped its harnes and tried to ride back to the Hub because next thing I remember I was in the middle of the desert and a man in massive metal armour was picking me up off of the dehydrated bramin. When I woke up again I was in the Brotherhood Of Steel base, Apparently one of the patrols had found me nearly dead and unconsciouse on the back of a bramin north of the BOS base. They allowed my to stay on the upper level of the base until the next caravan arrived, then I would have to return to whatever settlement with them. A caravan arrived two days later from Junktown, I saddled up with them and left the BOS base giving them my best regards and thanks for saving my life.

I arrived at the Junktown three weeks after we had discovered the Base in the mountains. To my name I had a 9mm pistol with no ammo, a knife a few scraps of food and water, about 200 caps and a suit of leather armour. But thats when my troubles really began.
 
The story's not all too bad, 7ycell, but really: try to use the "spellcheck" button next time. It's there, it's free, and it will ensure your story isn't littered with errors next time.
 
Jebus said:
The story's not all too bad, 7ycell

If you took any of the Drizzt Do'Urden novels and removed any trace of a setting, perhaps. Non-sequitur narration is quite painful to read, especially when there's no setting placement. After that, it becomes a jumble of nouns and verbs without any relation to each other.
 
Roshambo said:
Jebus said:
The story's not all too bad, 7ycell

If you took any of the Drizzt Do'Urden novels and removed any trace of a setting, perhaps.

Good lord... You mean people have actually written Drizzt Do'Urden novels?

Great. My faith in humanity takes another beating.
 
Jebus said:
Good lord... You mean people have actually written Drizzt Do'Urden novels?

Sarcasm on my part. :) Most of R.A. Salvatore's work is nothing but loosely-connected action sequences with throwaway characters and a paint-by-number approach. Important aspect of writing - SETTING!
 
Aye, I respect all ur crit, Next post will b written in Word (spell check) and will have better setting, this was just a quick thing I slapped together to set up teh backround. Note teh Fallout 1 references (Most from Harolds Story fo far.)

More will come and it will be presentable, I promise :).
 
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1337 speek is Not Allowed.
 
Pt 2:

I stepped through the hollowed out truck carcase that served as the front gate to Junk Town, the gaurd on the door eyed me menecingly as I passed him. I had visited this place once before, some years ago when it was just a scrap heap and a few sheds, now it had grown into a full blown settlement. Peasants lined the streets huddling around burning barrles cooking rate on the flames. The gaurd shed was immediatly infront of me. Inside I could clearly make out several arm figures through the haze and gloom.

I began wandering deeper into town trying to think of a way to gather enough people and go back to that god forsaken base. I ended up in the Skum Pit, not a 5 star establiment but it was about as good as it got in the wastes. I stayed there until the early hours. I would need about thirty men, heavyly armed, a large supply of water and food, medic supplies, perhaps a caravan or two to transport the supplies.

Once we got to the base we would need to find Grey and Harold or rather there bodies, it had been about three week. Oh hell I dont even know where the damn base is, its not like I was wearing one of those old PIPMAN 3000's or whatever they were called... I'm going to need a job and a better guns before I can start building this force... Hmmm, that waitress is fine...

I awoke to the sound of onehundred bramin stampeeding in my head, what did they pass off as beer in this place? I rolled my aching head over noticing the arm accross my chest, the waitress from the scum pit. After a few moments lying there desperatly trying to remember if I had used a jimmy hats I rolled over and sliped out of bed. I stretched long and hard, my back and shoulders cracking in several places.

"You dont need to leave." A voice came from behind me.

"I can't have children." Well at least somthing was going my way. I turned around and looked at the girl in the bed she smiled and looked down, I realised I was wearing nothing. I hastfuly scooped up my cloths and pulled them on, checking over my gear, everything was there minus 20 caps for the room. I sat on the bed fully dressed, I did up my boots and cracked my neck.

"I'll be back in about an hour, gonna try find myself a job, you ok waiting here?" I looked at the girl, She smiled at me and said.

"You'know, I could probably get you a job at the Skum Pitt if your interested, Neal's lookin for a new man so he can have a little more time to himself."

"That'd be a start, you think I should go see him?"

"Yea, sure, whatever, just tell him Reyeena sent you and he'll sort you right out."

I nodded and dragged myself out of the hotel room door. How did I know it was a hotel? Because there was one of the frikkin little bibles on the table top. I let the door swing shut behind me and walked over to the counter. The lady at the desk looked up at me with a face that exspected trouble.

"Sleep well?" She inquired

"Sleep? No, I was unconscious." I let slip a little smile, she seemed to relax a bit and smiled back. Damn I was thirsty and my head didnt help.

"Got any water around here?" She pointed to a fridge that lay against one wall. I was almosts surprised to realise that a town like this had power, and I was in no state the night before to put the fact that the lighting was lit to any use. I opened up the fridge and surveyed the contence. A few iguania that had been burnt on sticks, a few peices of loose meat, an empty beer bottle and four bottles of water. I picked one up and walked back to the counter.

"How much?"

"First ones free with a room honey." I ripped open the bottle and guzeled the water down, hoping to bypass my taste buds, I failed. I took a gasp of air and placed the empty bottle on the counter.

I adjusted my belt and stepped out of the doorway that had natural light flooding through it. The heat of the sun on my skin put me a little more at ease, I sniffed the air, it smelt of dry dirt and rubbish. I looked back as I walked towards the main path. "The Crash House Hotel" Fitting name. I reached the main route through town, got a bearing on my position and headed west towards the Skum Pitt.

The places looked normal from the outside, a large sign dipicting the name was the only thing that made it stand out from the other sheds that lined the area. I pushed open the main door and stepped inside, the lights were off but there were enough cracks and bulletholes in the walls to light the place up, there were broken bottles, puddles of puke and a few spent cartriges scattered around the floor.

*Click* the feel of cold steel against the back of my head told me I was in trouble. I slowly raised my hands above my head.

"How the hell did you get in here punk?" The voice sounded raspy but young.

"Through the front door, it was open." There was a moments pause... *Cli-chunk* the barrle was pulled away from my head.

"Damn, keep forgetting to lock that door. Turn around slowly." I did as instructed, before me stood a rather small skinny man, he was wearing a tattered green top and grey trousers, the damn largest hand gun I'd ever seen was in his hand he was balding slightly. I recognised him as the barman from the night before.

"Neal right?" I was shortly staring down the barrle of the very large gun, his hand was steady.

"How'd you know my name stranger! I dont recolect talkin to you last night. And wheres my waitress?!" I looked him in the eyes. I could whip the gun out of his hands and elbow him in the face, he whould know what hit him... or.

"Reyeena sent me about a job, said you were looking for a new man." The man hesitated for a moment.

"Thats right, hmm, you look like you can handle yourself... clear up the tables and floor, then we can talk." The man turned and began walking back towards the bar his large gun in his hand. I wasnt happy about the sharp shrug off but I decided I needed the job for the time being, at least until I could figure out a what I was going to do next. A woman walked out of the door at the back of the bar, she wasnt much to look at but she had a cracking rack on her.

"Who was it dear?" She said.

"Just some guy lookin for work Harriet, nothing to worry about." He walked through into the back door with her grabbing a bottle of booze from under the bar as he passed it.

As he had asked, well ordered, I cleared up the pitt. Half an hour later I had finished, the place was spick and spam- well... it was as clean as it was gonna get. I doubt anyone could get those stains out for love nor money. I wiped my brow, All the work had cleared my hangover right up and I felt awake and ready for more work. I walked over to the bar and sat on one of the stools casually looking at the distillery equiptment behind the bar. Neil walked out of the back room door a few moments later.

"HA! You actually stayed and cleared up. Heck I though you was gonna just walk on out like the others, I guess that qualifies you for the job mister. What you say your name was? ...Mark eh? I'm Neil, this here is my Skum Pitt, only bar in town and your new work address haha. Welcome to the team, you've already met Reyeena and the woman out back is my wife Harriet. I'm Neal as you already know. Now, got any questions?"

"Whats that gun you've got and where did you get it?" I smiled eagerly as I had noticed the small pile of "Guns and Ammo" monthly on the shelf under the distillery. Neal grinned and let out a small chuckle. He drew his firearm from the home made holster slash pocket in his trousers and paraded it beofer me with a glint in his eye.

"You have a fine eye, this here is a Sig-Sauer 14mm auto pistol. Large single shot handgun, Excellent craftmanship. Min ST:4- Oh sorry... heh, ignore that last bit. I picked this baby up at an old raider battle feild when I used to be a traverling man. I figured the raiders had killed so much of each other off they couldnt carry all of the weapons and ammo so they just left them on the dead bodys..."

Me and Neal talked for a little while once I got to know him he was a really nice guy. Level headed and nearly always calm. As the day wore on he taught me how to server customers and how much everything was. After about 2 hours of training and talk of mainly guns I bid him farewell and left through the side door on my way back to the Crash House Hotel.

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Bare with me, I am building up to summthing. Like what you've read? Dont like it? Tell me. And please no spelling corrections - if you cant tell what somthing says, aks. Otherwise you are wasting your breath. :)
 
Pt 3:

I walked around to the front of the Pitt and began making my way south east through town. As I approched 'Gizmo's Casino' I had been to preocupied before to notice the rotating red neon sign. Inside I could hear slot machines and card tables being played by the foolish and desperate. There was a bouncer on the door, a small man with a red jumper and grey worn trousers, I wondered why it was this Gizmo charicter used such a small scrawny man as a bouncer. He couldnt stop a rad-rat let alone some drunk gambler who wanted there money back. I figured he must have backup around somwhere. The man had noticed me staring and clicked his fingers, a large black male in metal armour steped out from the shadowy interior of the casino. The man in rags nodded in my direction and the large guy began staring at me with a menecing look. I was way to far away to be threatening to them so I figured they were scoping me out, me being the new face in town and all.

As I approched the Crash House Hotel from behind I noticed a door at the back with what appeared to be two gaurds in non uniform standing outside it. Junktown had its own police force so to speak, they were all dressed in Bramin hide uniforms but these guys were wearing leather jackets and worn out leathe armour. I was curious but not stupid and I walked straight past without looking at them directly. I entered the Crash House and was instantly greeted by the woman at the main desk.

"If you want to stay another night its another 25 caps." She said as soon as I had opened my mouth.

"No, I dont want a room right now but do you know where the Reyeena is.? I asked sheepishly for some reason.

"No, she left about half an hour ago, I think she was going to the store but I'm not sure." Damn, I thought, I really wanted to 'thank' her for helping me get a job.

"Ok, no problem. Say, do you know why theres two guys standing by the door out back?"

"Oh there the skullz, the local gang, nothing to worry about, they dont do much harm, usually just pranksters."

"So why do you let them stay?" I asked intregued.

"Because they can afford it, I dont know where they get the money and its none of my business." I pondered for a moment and then remember why I had come back here.

"Ok, See ya later." She nodded as I left.

I made my way to the big shed marked "Darkwaters - General Store", this was the only store in town but it had nearly everything you could want, guns, supplies and... more guns. I passed the gaurds on the door and stepped in, I coudlnt see Reyeena anywhere but though nothing of it, I walked over to the only man who wasnt wearing the Junktown Gaurd Uniform. I was stood in a large there were three tables in the middle of the room and various other tables and shelfs scattered around the place. A gaurd stood in the corner and what appeared to be the owner was stood infront of me with a slight grin on his face.

"Well howdy, what can I do for ya?" The man was wearing grey trousers and a dull green shirt and camoflagued millitary jacket, dog tags dangled around his neck. A Desert Eagle rested in the holster on his right leg and he had a large scar accross the left side of his face, he must of been in his fifties.

"I'm looking for some 9mm munitions." The mans eyes widened.

"9mm you say?! You have a 9mm loading weapon?" I nodded and pulled out my 9mm Glock.

It was in good condition and almost looked like I had just pulled it out of its box. I had found it in the Brotherhood Of Steel store room tucked away behind some piping. I hadnt reported it to the quatermaster as it had no ammo and would most likly of been no use to the 'put 1000 holes in your ass' weapon weilding brotherhood. I was surprised that this guy seemed to be so interested in such an old weapon.

"Sweet mother of... Do you know how rare 9mm weapons are?" he said, I shruged.

"Ever since they introduced the more powerful 10mm, 9mm was basiclly pushed to the back of the shelf, what you got there friend is an antique." He wouldnt stop staring at the gun.

"So thats a no then?" I said about to put the now worthless gun away.

"Hell no, just so happens I have a whole box of 9mm out back, never though I'd see the day when I'd sell them, heck I though I'd never see a 9mm again. Killian... KILLIAN!" from the door at the side of the room a head popped out.

"Yes pop?" A young Killian Darkwater, around about his twentys, poked his head out of the door.

"Get that old box of 9mm for the gentleman will ya?" At those words Killians eyes lit up.

"9mm you say... sur-sure thing pop." Killian dissapeared back behind the door. The old man turned to look at me.

"That theres my son Killian, he'll be mayor of this town when I am gone." I smiled casually, not really caring to hear this guys life story.

Killian re appeared from behind the door with a light brown box cupped in his hands. He walked over clumped it down on the table then he bent down and blew all of the dust off of the top of the box. A green box now lay before me, atop the box in an old white millitary font was "XKDT-244-591-12 9mm munitions". The old man grinned a toothy grin and then, after a brief struggle, pulled off the top of the box. Before my lay the most pristine condition ammo crate you could ever see. On the left side were ten holders, each holder had two clips in it, there were many types of clip but I noticed that there were eight clips that would fit my gun, the other 2/3 of the box on the right was a wall of glistning 9mm rounds all stacked in formation, there must have been 800 rounds at least. I looked at it in awe and went to pick up one of the clips. As soon as my hand approched the old man slammed the box shut, nearly catching my fingers.

"Do you have anything to trade for these?" My heart sunk, all I had left was about 34 caps a few scraps of meat, there was no way I was going to trade my armour for this and apart from the glock, thats all I had. The old man shook his head as I presented the caps and meat scraps to him.

"Your kiddin right? A few scaps of bramin and 34 caps?!" I felt like kicking myself for being stupid enough to walk into a store with nothing to trade.

"This is all I have." I felt like kicking myself again.

"Mister, I wouldn't spit in your hand for that." Now I just felt like kicking the old man's head until he shit teeth. I went to walk out planning to come back tommorrow with a nice pay check from the Pitt.

"But... There is another way you could earn yourself this whole crate." I didnt like the sound of this but I stopped and look the man in the eyes anyway interested in what hell hole he was going to make me crawl through before he gave me the crate.

"See, I got no use for this ammo and you aint gonna get far with an unloaded gun, even if it is pre war tech." I waited for the catch.

"Yeea." I said timidly.

"Well see, you do a few... errands for me and I might see my way into giving you this here whole crate, heh, belive me stranger if you pull it off it'll be well worth it on my behalf."

He smiles at me intencely a half crazed look in his eye. I almost esxpected him to stark cackling like one of those brush riding super humans with magic powers I heard of when I was a kid. I didnt like this but I needed a loaded gun rather than just a deterant. I regretfully decided to accept his offer.

"Ok I'm interested, what are you suggesting?" I said in an emotionless pissed off kinda tone. The old man smiled.

"Ok heres the bottom line, We have been having trouble from a small group of thifes operating from a small encampment about a half hours journey west from here. We havent got any evidence on them and so I cant rally the guards and go sort them out. I figure you know how to handle yourself so I tell you what. You kill them off and bring back whatever it is they have stolen, to be honest we arnt exactly sure how much stuff they have taken but they could move on at any moment and we need to act now. You head out to there camp and kill them off and I'll give you this whole box of ammo, now is that a fair deal or what?"

I must of done somthing right in a past life, I was exspecting a crusade to the ends of the earth and back for a computer chip or somthing but an hour and a halfs work for all those munitions? Seemed a good deeal to me. I began grinning manicly, I could feel the bloodthirsty instinct of my radier heritage pumping through my veins.

"Consider it done, but I'm going to need a few rounds so that I can... dispose of these theifs... now where exactly did you say there were..."

fourty minuets later I was looking down onto a small group of about four or five people, it would appear they were packing up and getting ready to leave. Darkwater had given me five clips, fully loaded. It was more than enough. I began walking down the slope towards there encampment at a steady pace, my glock drawn and hidden behind my back. The nomads looked up at me as they were packing the last of there stuff onto the hand drawn cart. They all looked suspect. I got to within about ten meters of them before they actually stopped what they were doing and looked at me.

"Howdy folks!" I said.

I swung my gun around from behind my back and capped a round into the closest nomads head, immediatly after I put two more slugs into the chest of the one holding the tent up. One of the other ones had begun to run I put a slug into there back around about the center of the spinal chord. The last one was trying to draw a hunting rifle from the cart. Three more shots to there chest and they slumped to the ground. I walked over to the one that I had shot in the back, they were clinging onto life, unable to move from what would become there dusty grave. I stood above them and put a final slug into the back of there head, a mercy killing. Cold, fast, skillful, emotionless killing of a lesser opponent, it wasnt pretty but it was how things got done in the wastes. I stripped the bodies naked and piled all there stuff onto the hand cart. With one of the tent poles, a beam of wood from the cart and a little blood and rags I erected a sign post above where I had dragged the four bodies. "Theifs Die" It read. I didnt know they were theifs and frankly I didnt care, it was all nice and civil in settlements but out in the wastes it was 'kill or be dinner'.

The hardest part was dragging the cart back up the hill I had just walked down, but once I got to the top it was pretty much flats all the way to the front door. an hour later I dropped the cart off at the gaurd shed just inside the entrance to the town. I had alrady gone through the cart and taked all the caps and some water. I figured Darkwater would expect no less. I left the cart in the trusty hands of the head gaurd who's job it was now to re distribute the stolen items. I made my way back to the store. As I walked in I could hear the sound of clapping.

"Well done Mark, You are a man of your word, incase you didnt realise I had you followed to make sure you did a good job." The man grinned as if he felt superior to me in someway for outsmarting me.

"Yea I noticed you sent Killian out after me to radio back what had happened." The look on the old mans face was worth 1000 caps. His jaw just dropped.

"You knew he was following you? since when?" He seemed a little more causious with his words.

"Since about five minutes after I left town." I wanted to grin my face off but I had to hold it in. The old man soon got a little roudy. He grabbed a radio from off one of the desks and began yelling down it.

"YOU DAMN IDIOT KILLIAN! HE KNEW YOU WERE THERE SINCE YOU LEFT TOWN, DONT GIVE ME NONE OF THAT 'HE DIDNT KNOW I WAS THERE' BRAMIN SHIT YOU DAMN FOOL!" He seemed to calm down and his face went back to slighly red rather than deep red.

"Well, I got to hand it to you for a job well done. And a deals a deal, the ammo's yours, hell nothing I can do with it."

I smiled and picked up the crate, I began making my way back to the crash house feeling good, I was one large crate of ammo, seven canteens of water and about 400 caps up. A good days work, but the day wasnt over, it was getting near sundown and that ment that my shift in the Skum Pitt would be starting soon. I was begginging to Like Junktown.
 
When I first saw Killian Darkwater, I couldn't help it but like the guy.
Someone who still upheld the town's laws, despite the fact that Earth was pretty much fucked.

......I miss playing the Fallout games. Hope F3 will be good enough.

Anyways, back to your story. You made it sound very easy for Mark to kill the 'theifs'. Didn't even bother to take cover or anything and went all Dirty Harry.

Still, your story is just good enough to ignore that. For now.
But please, don't stop writting because of some criticism. There aren't many that post Fallout stories here, and when they do, they really aren't that great.

Uh, no offence to you guys.

Peace, I'm out.
 
Yea I was going for the whole, kill the thiefs with great easy look when I wrote that, want the readers to know just how easy it is for him to kill :)

Post Fallout? this is Pre Fallout lol :) Killians dad is running the store :)

And yes there is more on the way, thanks for the comments.
 
I knew that.

No, really. I mean, the story starts when Harold and Grey and Mark and his team are inside the base. Doesn't take a genius to figure that one out.

It's just that the story happens in the world of Fallout, which is a game I miss playing. That's what I meant.

And I'll be looking forward to read more.

Just one question: Will Mark run into 8 feet tall green super-mutant?
 
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