What Happens in Vegas...

Mr Krepe

Water Chip? Been There, Done That
The following event are based on the events of the fallout universe and you should not consider them cannon (it would be cool if you did though)



Chapter 1: Heebey Jeebeys

02/04/2277


After a several weeks of occupation, Hoover Dam started actually looking reasonably good. The NCR arrived 5 weeks ago and evicted all of the junkies and raiders hiding in the underbelly of the Hoover Dam, and started building it into a settlement of good size. Traders such as the Crimson Caravan used this a drop off point, and people who had no home started flocking to the NCR's newest outpost.

The rangers started flocking to other places of interest in the surrounding area to try and find areas to colonise. But, one day they came across something which was rather daunting. The patrol headed by Sgt. Welldale was scouting the McCarran Airport on the outskirts of New Vegas.

The squad was made up of varied group of men. Welldale was from Shady itself, and was originally a member of the Shady Police Force when he decided to join the Rangers. John, a super mutant with a shady past, but the squad would rather not talk about it. Zachary, a ghoul who migrated from Necropolis to Redding due to The Master's once rampant force, and finally the marksman of the group, Juice or that's what everybody calls him, he once lived in Vault City as Brahmin herder, but as times got hard in Vault City he joined the Rangers.

As Welldale and Zachary were walking down what appeared to be the longest corridor they had ever walked down, John and Juice were holding the entrance.
"This place gives me the heebey jeebeys John, i'm surprised the boys back at the dam hadn't reccied this place yet", Juice remarked while scoping in on the hall.

John replied after what seemed like an eternity, "Yeah, this place is odd, i'm sure I can hear something".

John starting readying Minigun, this put Juice on edge.
"Do you have to do that, it isn't exactly helping my fear of ghouls" Juice looked nervous, his arms were laced with goosebumps, his hair was on edge.

Back at the corridor Welldale and Zachary noticed a locked door, why was it locked though? Welldale pulled a crowbar out of his backpack and ripped the door open. Zachary pumped his shotgun, no sweat was dropping off him, but the radiation that made him a ghoul wouldn't let him sweat.

"Clear!" shouted Zachary as he pointed in one corner of the room. Zachary walked slowly to a cabinet in a corner of the room, Welldale's heart was pumping faster than the hydraulics back in the dam. Zachary slowly reached for the door of the cabinet, he was trembling so fast his gun nearly slipped out of his hand several times. He clasped the door handle and creaked it open, phew nothing was inside.

But, that was too late, it was too fast for Welldale to shout, it was too fast to do anything. A ghoul roared out of the shadows and dived on Zachary, Welldale shot at the ghoul, but it had no effect on it, it was relentless. It ripped Zach apart, there was nothing Welldale could do, the group had awaken.

As he sprinted down the corridor and looked behind him, all he could see was a sea of horror raring after him. He hopped over the guard fence and landed in the hall that the other two were guarding.

John started firing into the hoard, ripping them apart, while Juice picked them off while they came at them. Welldale ran past John and Juice. John was overrun, but he ripped them off with his super mutant strength, he lifted up Juice and started bounding to catch up with Welldale. They all hopped in the buggy as Welldale started revving, while this was going on a fiesty ghoul leaped up and ripped Juice off the buggy, and made quick work of him, John started unloading a whole clip into the relentless hoard.

The buggy lost them fortunately, but this still didn't make up for today's losses, but what was about to happen was going to shake them even more.






Chapter 2 will be available in a week.
 
Mr Krepe said:
The following event are based on the events of the fallout universe and you should not consider them cannon (it would be cool if you did though)



Chapter 1: Heebey Jeebeys

02/04/2277


After a several weeks of occupation, Hoover Dam started actually looking reasonably good. The NCR arrived 5 weeks ago and evicted all of the junkies and raiders hiding in the underbelly of the Hoover Dam, and started building it into a settlement of good size. Traders such as the Crimson Caravan used this a drop off point, and people who had no home started flocking to the NCR's newest outpost.

The rangers started flocking to other places of interest in the surrounding area to try and find areas to colonise. But, one day they came across something which was rather daunting. The patrol headed by Sgt. Welldale was scouting the McCarran Airport on the outskirts of New Vegas.

The squad was made up of varied group of men. Welldale was from Shady itself, and was originally a member of the Shady Police Force when he decided to join the Rangers. John, a super mutant with a shady past, but the squad would rather not talk about it. Zachary, a ghoul who migrated from Necropolis to Redding due to The Master's once rampant force, and finally the marksman of the group, Juice or that's what everybody calls him, he once lived in Vault City as Brahmin herder, but as times got hard in Vault City he joined the Rangers.

As Welldale and Zachary were walking down what appeared to be the longest corridor they had ever walked down, John and Juice were holding the entrance.
"This place gives me the heebey jeebeys John, i'm surprised the boys back at the dam hadn't reccied this place yet", Juice remarked while scoping in on the hall.

John replied after what seemed like an eternity, "Yeah, this place is odd, i'm sure I can hear something".

John starting readying Minigun, this put Juice on edge.
"Do you have to do that, it isn't exactly helping my fear of ghouls" Juice looked nervous, his arms were laced with goosebumps, his hair was on edge.

Back at the corridor Welldale and Zachary noticed a locked door, why was it locked though? Welldale pulled a crowbar out of his backpack and ripped the door open. Zachary pumped his shotgun, no sweat was dropping off him, but the radiation that made him a ghoul wouldn't let him sweat.

"Clear!" shouted Zachary as he pointed in one corner of the room. Zachary walked slowly to a cabinet in a corner of the room, Welldale's heart was pumping faster than the hydraulics back in the dam. Zachary slowly reached for the door of the cabinet, he was trembling so fast his gun nearly slipped out of his hand several times. He clasped the door handle and creaked it open, phew nothing was inside.

But, that was too late, it was too fast for Welldale to shout, it was too fast to do anything. A ghoul roared out of the shadows and dived on Zachary, Welldale shot at the ghoul, but it had no effect on it, it was relentless. It ripped Zach apart, there was nothing Welldale could do, the group had awaken.

As he sprinted down the corridor and looked behind him, all he could see was a sea of horror raring after him. He hopped over the guard fence and landed in the hall that the other two were guarding.

John started firing into the hoard, ripping them apart, while Juice picked them off while they came at them. Welldale ran past John and Juice. John was overrun, but he ripped them off with his super mutant strength, he lifted up Juice and started bounding to catch up with Welldale. They all hopped in the buggy as Welldale started revving, while this was going on a fiesty ghoul leaped up and ripped Juice off the buggy, and made a quick meal out of him, John started unloading a whole clip into the relentless hoard.

The buggy lost them fortunately, but this still didn't make up for today's losses, but what was about to happen was going to shake them even more.






Chapter 2 will be available in a week.

Ferals don't attack other ghouls. The line in bold dosen't make sense. Your chapter titles like a gay scooby doo saying, Ferals don't eat humans, never been proven. Theres no reason for them to hunger for flesh, they're just ghouls whose condition has driven them insane, either from the shock of it or from just their mind slowly degrading. Jumps into action too fast, not enough time to introduce characters, and its too short.

I hope you'll improve upon these, as the base of the story has potential, but it seems like a childs story right now. Just flesh it out, put more detail into it and the quality will improve.

Oh and Welldales a complete fucking pussy.
 
1. Sorry about the ghoul mistake, I take complete idiotic responsibility over that.
2.Radiation can do odd things to you, radiation can make you......burnt, cancerous, riddled with diseases, as well as often causing you skin not to be able to sweat. (If i'm wrong on that, blame my physics teacher).
3. Just because there's a nuclear fallout doesn't mean people can't talk like that, i.e day before fallout "Wassup dawg i'm getting heebey jeebeys off that hobo", day late "Hello my friend, the hobo is odd". By the way the title is based of what Juice said.
4. Sorry about ghouls eating humans, I associate them with zombies too much.
5. I thought it would be better if Welldale was chickenshit to be honest, the hard one of the group was going to be John.
6. Thanks for the critiscism I'll repair it.
 
Your saying that zach can't sweat, but the radiation kept him from sweating. Your saying he can't sweat but he can't sweat.
 
He can't but he can't sweat?

It don't matter now i've written it and that characters dead so he can't bother you anymore with his bodies problems. I'm thinking of doing a mark 2 version, because of all the gaping flaws in this.
 
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