Eschaton project; teaser intro script

Right, so you registered here to tell us the beginning story of a game of which you can show us nothing but this and a bunch of useless keyphrases like 'Character Evolution' (Trademark? Give me a break), voice acting, 'unique and comprehensive plotline'.
Also, you posted in the wrong forum.

And there is no reason whatsoever for us to be interested in this, it has nothing to do with Fallout, for as far as we can tell, you're not involved in the community, and you have nothing to show that this game isn't just another bit of vaporware like all the others we've seen here. If you can actually make it this might be interesting, but forgive me for not being enthusiastic about a game for which all you have to show is an intro script.
 
Wait, that's your DESIGN DOCUMENT AND STORYBOARD?

The intro script?

You're really asking to be flamed, are you?

Sidenote: When will people learn "Best viewed with/at ..." is so 1997?

"Best viewed with/at" means "I suck so hard I can only cater towards one browser/resolution and tell everybody else to go fuck theirselves".

EDIT: No surprise, really. Your website isn't even real HTML.
 
sinarty said:
Hello everyone, I'm sinarty, Project Director, PR Mangager, Design Director, Storyboard/Dialgue/Script Writer, Lead Art Director, Concept Artist, Modeller and Webmaster of the Eschaton project.
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... so are you the only person working the project? What role do you not function as?
 
I'm sinarty, Project Director, PR Mangager, Design Director, Storyboard/Dialgue/Script Writer, Lead Art Director, Concept Artist, Modeller and Webmaster of the Eschaton project.
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So you are one of those jack of all trades "developars"? Or rather jack of no trades, judging by the unprofessionality of your approach to the project.

Eschaton is a sci-fi futuristic single player rpg based on Half-Life 2's Source engine.
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I pity the poor soul who gave you money for the license.

Unless you are just modding Half Life 2, which makes you a liar.

anyhow, I would like to present you the begining script of the game. it is both a design doc, and a script/storyboard.
comments, crits, flames is always welcome
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Design doc, script and storyboard are three completely disjunct terms, and this garbled mess you posted cannot be qualified as either.
 
wow, i didn't expect to see such replies.
i just showed you the script for you to comment on...
is that such a hard thing to do?

and no, im ont the only one working on the project.
and its a hl2 mod.

the only thing i asked is for you to comment, crit the script. :oops:
 
Well, we are kind of allergic to projects that have next to no substance, as you might have guessed.

Shall I order a pizza be brought to your drawing board?
 
Silencer said:
Well, we are kind of allergic to projects that have next to no substance, as you might have guessed.

Shall I order a pizza be brought to your drawing board?
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the god damn project aint a subject here, i only asked to comment on the script. that a hard thing to do?
 
sinarty said:
the god damn project aint a subject here, i only asked to comment on the script. that a hard thing to do?
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No.

And if someone feels like commenting on the script, no doubt he or she will.

However, you posted on our forum, meaning that we set the subject and tone here. Just because you started this thread does not mean you get to dictate its course. By posting about your project here you opened it up to criticism. Don't like it? Don't read it. The moderators here are fine with the subject, obviously.
 
you're right... im sorry.
meh..
anyhow, what do you think of the script?
anything i should add/change/remove?
and how do you like the whole idea?

I havent written this yet, but eventually, the space station crashes into earth.
I'm still not sure how i want earth to look like; maybe post apocaclyptic and war-torn?
 
All right, VDweller, you're a bit late for the stampede; Either contribute something or get out, because now you're just blatantly flaming.
 
sinarty said:
you're right... im sorry.
meh..
anyhow, what do you think of the script?
anything i should add/change/remove?
and how do you like the whole idea?
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Explain the 'whole idea' to us. All I can see is some dude who has implants wakes up aboard a space ship and starts exploring. Whoop-dee-doo. Now what?

I havent written this yet, but eventually, the space station crashes into earth.
I'm still not sure how i want earth to look like; maybe post apocaclyptic and war-torn?
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Why are you asking us? Do you want us to write your game for you? Go do it yourself, it's your game. Or at the very least ask your teammates.

Look, if you want some input or, well, anything from us come up with something other than 'Ooh, look at this'.
What's the stat system going to look like? What's the general idea? Any quests? Any general storyline?
 
Silencer said:
All right, VDweller, you're a bit late for the stampede
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I replied to the post directly above mine, made a few hours earlier. What seems to be the problem, officer?

Either contribute something ...
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Like what? What could one contribute here? Something like "Hmm, I think you are on the right track, sinarty! With a lot of hard work and a little bit of luck, you might eventually create something that doesn't suck?"

... because now you're just blatantly flaming.
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I thought that that piece of prose called design doc/script/story board asked for nothing but flaming, but hey, it's your house, man, so I will shut up and pay attention to non-flaming contributions and constructive criticism. Maybe even take notes.
 
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