My Poems (DANGER! DANGER! twisted humor poems!)

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The Moron FKA TheBigL

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well I will post only 1 now but I will post some of them later

A Poem 2 A Shitty Friend

( Put a name of some1 u know )
was beaten,
shit eaten
killed by his very own friends.

so sorry, he never heard of the story
cause I could have told him
the fun his friends had.

MHAHAHAHAHA
he was noob and he deserved to die
just like u gonna cry!

Yes u, the one who reads my F***ing Diary
U have to admire me
just finish attaching it with a friendly smiley
the smiley that makes things fly away
so am I gonna see u in the graveyard today?

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:lol: what do you think?
 
Blade Runner said:
TheBigL said:
Blade Runner said:
TheBigL said:
:lol: what do you think?
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I think I wanna jump of a tall building and land on your sorry ass!

:twisted:
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what that supose to mean? :? :shock:
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:puke:

It means 'I wanna jump off a tall building and land on your sorry ass.'

:twisted:

Goddamn poets...
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I am still:
what that supose to mean? :? :shock:
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good? bad? owful? nice? what? and describe what u didnt liked / like please
 
To many "U's!"

I hate it...

Mary had a little lamb, I beat it with a holepuncher!
*da dun dun daa!*

Mohrg :twisted:
 
Gustav_Drangeid said:
It means he doesn't like it... Deal with it.
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well he could just said so and what he doesnt like :D
this way I will improve in the future :D

what about you?

ohhh and Mr. nice clown what do you mean by "U" and tell me more what you didnt liked.
 
The only thing more stupid than poetry is a poetry critic. You're the one with the mastery of language, YOU tell US why it sucked!
 
TheBigL said:
ohhh and Mr. nice clown what do you mean by "U" and tell me more what you didnt liked.
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I told you what I didn't like, the "U's." Its not all that differcult to spell out "You."

Oh and are your wearing a homo barret and do you sport a odd French mustache?

If so, NEVER talk again, EVER.

Oh ya and listen to Mur, U, *cough gasp* YOU, tell us why it blew.

Mohrg :twisted:
 
TheBigL said:
well he could just said so and what he doesnt like :D
this way I will improve in the future :D

what about you?

ohhh and Mr. nice clown what do you mean by "U" and tell me more what you didnt liked.
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Hey dude: are you for real? You remind me of that Devil guy from months ago. Yeah, Devil. Weird guy. Kept spamming about totally absurd shit. Bored us to hell. Ha.

:tired:

We had to shoot him.

:lightning:

Now... about that stupid poem of yours... poetry is not really very popular on this forum. People who are called Shakespeare or Byron or Keats or Shelley or God are shot on sight, so beware... We are watching you...
 
Well... ok I understood. that "U" didnt liked my poem, couse:

1. I used "U" instead of "you"

2. People on this forum dont like poetry!

NOW the is the biggest pile of shit I have ever read!!!!

I dont like poetry either that why I always make fun of it like in this poem (and many others) couse I write in twisted way.

and as miner thing I have learn is that:
IN POETRY a POET can change whings as he like, he doesnt have to be held by the ruls of the language. That why I used "U".

now stop beeing babys and tell me what wrong with it.
 
TheBigL said:
now stop beeing babys and tell me what wrong with it.
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You have actually answered that question yourself:

TheBigL said:
the is the biggest pile of shit I have ever read!!!!
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That and the fact that you seem to be using "U" instead of "you"!!! :eek:
You should know better than that...
 
This should really belong in the Fan Fiction section, TheBigL.

...and, adding in my two cents, poetry is not a joke. A poem can relate an epic in so little words or convey more emotion than a lengthy description. It's harder to write, also. Only, it gets a bad rap, because it's either sterotyped for tree-huggers and sentimentalists or its wrongly portrayed by idiots who are trying too hard to sound obtuse and mysterious like the prigs who try to bite off the authentic styles of great poets like ee cummings. I have an English teacher who puts on such airs since her nonsensical work has been published in a few minor magazines.
 
Gunslinger said:
This should really belong in the Fan Fiction section, TheBigL.

...and, adding in my two cents, poetry is not a joke. A poem can relate an epic in so little words or convey more emotion than a lengthy description. It's harder to write, also. Only, it gets a bad rap, because it's either sterotyped for tree-huggers and sentimentalists or its wrongly portrayed by idiots who are trying too hard to sound obtuse and mysterious like the prigs who try to bite off the authentic styles of great poets like ee cummings. I have an English teacher who puts on such airs since her nonsensical work has been published in a few minor magazines.
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BELIVE ME when I say that if you read Israeli poetry - YOU will hate it as much as I do.

and what do you say about the poem...

and didnt fanfiction is only for fallout fanfiction? :?
 
The Fan Fiction is for most creative media. Though you poem doesn't contain any Fallout relation, I'm betting that the audience there would give more pertaining advice. I think it would fit better in the FanFic section than in the Gen Discussion Board (but that's not up to me to decide).

As for what I thought about you're poem...well, it depends. You're rhyming scheme is conventional. Case in point:
MHAHAHAHAHA
he was noob and he deserved to die
just like u gonna cry!

I don't understand why you'd add that last line since this poem is directed to a "shitty friend". Either you're forcing the poem's tempo along or it's a nod at how the audience would view this poem.

But then again, English isn't your native tongue some I'm lenient in judging too much.
 
Gunslinger said:
The Fan Fiction is for most creative media. Though you poem doesn't contain any Fallout relation, I'm betting that the audience there would give more pertaining advice. I think it would fit better in the FanFic section than in the Gen Discussion Board (but that's not up to me to decide).

As for what I thought about you're poem...well, it depends. You're rhyming scheme is conventional. Case in point:
MHAHAHAHAHA
he was noob and he deserved to die
just like u gonna cry!

I don't understand why you'd add that last line since this poem is directed to a "shitty friend". Either you're forcing the poem's tempo along or it's a nod at how the audience would view this poem.

But then again, English isn't your native tongue some I'm lenient in judging too much.
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thanks for the criticem. :P (you are the only one who said something ).

that line is dedicated to 1 of my friends.
we always call each other a n00bs, because he is a pro in UnrealT
but noob in halo, and I am the opposite :D so when we play togather in one of thouse games we always refer to each other as noobs :D hihi.

if you feel it should be in funfiction, then you can just move it... fine with me 8)
 
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