Need some help...

[Nall13]

I'm working on a story based in the fallout universe now, which I intend to turn into a comic. What I need is a few people who are hard core fans like myself and can help me work out the finer plot points.

Basically the story revolves around a former Vault-tek scientist who diverted funds in the years leading up to the war in order to build his own private vault, unknown to anyone but him. He hand selected his test subjects from the best qualified applicants (scientists, artists, athletes, etc.) from the vault-tek registries and ensured that they all survived the fall by locking down the facility as soon as he had them all inside, three years before the great war.

He designed and set up his vault to run continued experiments with the FEV.

I have much more but I need some help getting the fine details worked out. I want to discuss my ideas and see how valid other fans find them before I commit to them.

I would like to know that whoever I talk to won't leak story I have or use it themselves, but the truth is I have no way of knowing any such thing. I just have to trust you guys to be a good community of genuinely honest people...

 

[Verevoof]

Well, what fine details do you want to know? General Fallout universe stuff? Then I suggest you visit and search through The Vault wiki, as it is loading with that sort of information. In order for us to help with specifics, we would have to know... well, the specifics.

Good luck, and if you want you can PM me. I'm a fellow writer, although not fanfiction, so you can trust me. Having ideas stolen is quite frustrating, but I would like to think that many people here are honest individuals.

 

[Brother None]

He designed and set up his vault to run continued experiments with the FEV.

So, uh, you're basing it on Fallout 3 lore? Because FEV is a military-grade virus that was developed first by West Tek in the West Tek Research Facility and then in Mariposa by the military according to original Fallout lore, it wasn't until Fallout 3 that suddenly Vault Tec, a private corp with no real other history as a military contractor, suddenly became involved in FEV testing/development.

And even given that, I don't see how a private citizen could get his hands on FEV, let alone the capabilities of producing/obtaining enough for long-term experimentation.

 

[Verevoof]

Yeah, FEV should be replaced with something different, as it doesn't really fit. Perhaps come up with your own idea, it is a fanfiction after all. If you're dead set on FEV, change the vault setting to a military base, or a military run vault.

And even given that, I don't see how a private citizen could get his hands on FEV, let alone the capabilities of producing/obtaining enough for long-term experimentation.

Well, instead of a private Vault Tec scientist, this person could change the character to a military scientist, in secret doing their own experiments or just plain gone rouge, perhaps because of dissatisfaction with the direction the experimentation was going, so the character either steals (kind of unlikely, since something like FEV would probably be accounted for at all times) or have a group of cohorts who are able to get the character what they want, but will face conflict down the line because of these actions.

Edit: I think the process of how or if this scientist is able to fulfull their wishes, whether they would be successful in obtaining their own FEV sample, and secure testing area, would make for an interesting story. Or the military scientist carries out their orders with the testing, but secretly doing their own thing at the same time. What sort of outcome would come out of their actions? That would be interesting.

 

[Nall13]

...FEV is a military-grade virus that was developed first by West Tek in the West Tek Research Facility and then in Mariposa by the military according to original Fallout lore, it wasn't until Fallout 3 that suddenly Vault Tec, a private corp with no real other history as a military contractor, suddenly became involved in FEV testing/development.

And even given that, I don't see how a private citizen could get his hands on FEV, let alone the capabilities of producing/obtaining enough for long-term experimentation.

You are, of course, right. Like I said this is all still in the infancy of the design and conceptualization phase, and these things are exactly what I need you guys to help me with.

So he should be a military scientist. It's my understanding that the Enclave existed pre war as a shadow wing of the US government, is that correct??? Or perhaps he was a scientist working for west-tek on the Pan-Immunity Virion Project...His natural intelligence and understanding of genetics helped make the project a reality, he knew what FEV was before it was FEV. Since his natural genius was coupled with raging narcissism and a deeply rooted superiority complex, he clashed with everyone he worked with, making him a target for the higher ups whos toes he had already begun to step on.

Seeing that he was teetering on the verge of losing not only his funding but also access to his precious research he began to use cloak and dagger techniques to divert funds and vault/research equipment to build his own personal vault. He hacked into the vault-tek system and rerouted hand selected individuals to his own vault, then locked them in during the first exposition/orientation, ensuring that he had all the genetic material he needed to continue his research.

Perhaps he even sabotaged the FEV strains before he left, replacing what he took with vats of altered strains, designed to fail where his would succeed.

Keep the comments and suggestions coming guys, it helps to work this all out so I can have a story that fits with what I see as the fallout world.

I'm thinking more like the setting of fallout 1/2/van buren. I've been reading over the design docs for the latter and it's given me a few really good ideas to work from.


Edit:

Yeah, FEV should be replaced with something different, as it doesn't really fit. Perhaps come up with your own idea, it is a fanfiction after all. If you're dead set on FEV, change the vault setting to a military base, or a military run vault...

Like I said, I don't have anything nailed down yet. But I do know that I don't want to sacrifice the major plot points, like what he's going to do with the FEV, for minor ones, like his employment history before the story took place...

I have no problem changing anything about the scientist, because he;s only a secondary character for what I have in mind, or perhaps a villain.

The main focus will be on a small group, maybe a few groups, of the species he created and the things they encounter after leaving the vault.

I figure on the story taking place, maybe a few hundred years after the great war, and the vault being large enough to actually encompass several sub vaults. Each sub vault would house one of the different species, with one dedicated to unaltered human populations used for stock, and another central vault housing the scientist.

Any thoughts???

 

[Verevoof]

Do you have this story already written? Even just a synopsis would do, I just think it would be easier to judge the direction it should go in if we could all read and critique what you have. I don't think the vaults had anything to do with FEV, save for the fact that the vault dwellers are prime subjects to be experimented on, but I don't think there was a vault specifically designed to do FEV testing, as it was a military thing, not a Vault Tec thing. There is Vault 87, which is Fallout 3, but you said you want to keep it in the realm of Fallout1/2/VB.

Here's something else about FEV. FEV was designed for pure humans to give them an edge in combat during the war. I don't think scientists pre-war, war, post-war would be using it on different species. The Master experimented with different species, but I don't think that a hired government scientist would. Unless I am misunderstanding and by different species you mean different variations of results from human FEV testing. I don't know, I'm just rambling.

 

[Nall13]

Sorry I don't have the story written yet, thats what I'm working on now.

And yes, I was talking about different variations of the human evolution that would take hold from the changes he made. So they would have all been human once, but he creates several new mutant species.

And again I should note that this isn't an official vault, just one the scientist had diverted funds and manpower to build, so it isn't something sanctioned by vault-tek or the government.

So if he was a West-tek researcher for the PVP he would know about it and have the chance to steal the research/samples. Which he would have moved to his personal vault for his experiments.

It's important to note that he isn't working for anyone but himself when he does this, this isn't something sanctioned by West-tek, Vault-tek, or the government.