OOC->Chapter 2: Lone Wanderers

Good stuff, Rogue.

I'm glad everyone has been so nice to Bear - all of you have described him excellently.

I have to revise a lot these few days - I have an English exam on Dickens' book, Hard Times, on Friday. But I should be able to write a post describing the supply team meeting up with the rescuers (probably this afternoon or this evening).
 
Yea, i've had quite a lot of final exams this week. Had nearly 4 hours of exams today. But nearly all finished now. :D
good luck for friday!

I have the next piece written, just need to make some finishing touches and then i'll post it.
 
nice job

Rogue and Reaper-

Nice job keeping the story moving. Almost out of the woods!

Enjoyed the posts tremendously. You guys are finishing this up very well.
 
Sorry for not posting yet. Been a little tied up to day. I'll do my damn best to get somthing posted tonight but i'm afraid i can't make any promesses. If i don't post tonight then it will be for certain in the morning.

Ciaos
 
Yeah, I was going to do a follow up post describing the aforementioned wedge tactic but I had my English exam today and it was my first one so I have been relaxing and winding down from the tension - because I'm rarely nervous I am not used to dealing with it.

Now I have more than two weeks till my next exam, well two exams in one day - Classical civilisations: The tragedies and The Roman Emperors - that should be fun.

Anyway, with a little extra time on my hands I should be able to write a couple of posts and get this chapter finished off. THough I hope that the break won't be too long till we start Chapter three up, I'm just getting into this.

It has been fun so far hasn't it.
 
Arrrr....Finally got chance to get on the net. Sooo, lets see if i can't atleast get this moving a little tonight!

Ciaos
 
back seat

Reaper and Rogue-

I am taking a back seat on this as it seems you both have your ideas on how this chapter to finish up. hope you don't mind but I am thinking it better than spoil your fun.

I am going to start a thread looking for new characters for Chapter 3 as well as ideas. I also think Gunslinger might be posting more when we get to chapter 3.

One thing, i think most of these NPCs will not carry over to Chapter 3. You don't have to kill them all, as they might help later in the story.

This chapter will probably end as soon as the group gets back off the El and into Tabis, but the only real hurdle is getting the cart group to the rescuers.

Anyway, have fun with it.
 
Okay, I was waiting for Rogue to step in and post even though I suppose I should have just continued on and described the wedge but hell, I'm just a bit lazy and I was worried about the constant gore. It tends to feature heavily in my work. This was one reason I have tried to keep the violence spaced out in my posts because I like it harsh and gritty when it happens - violence is stark and brutal and shocking.

But this battle scene (like Saving Private Ryan with the 20 minute opening battle sequence - so many people get shot and die hirrifically it stops meaning anything, each death is just another spray of red. THe deaths and the brutality of it all starts to stop hitting us the way it should. I have never shyed from movie or game violence - some call me an action junkie but I like the violence gritty and not comic because that undermines the harsh reality of it.

I saw the new Matrix film today and I loved it. It was spectacular - lots of good martial arts, great special effects but the fighting had that glossy fake element inherant in the grace of martial arts - it never looks realistic. I'm not talking about blood spraying, I'm talking about the lack of emotion and lack of brutality. It always looks like every blow is less like a man locked in mortal combat, and more like an artist applying strokes of paint to his canvas.

Moving away from this jaunt into my possibly warped psyche, I will finally make my point clear. I have been holding off because I did not want post after post about Gabriel slicing things up, backed by a few commandos. I was going to write it eventually but I like the switching perspectives we have going on here because of the simple posting mechanics. Anyone seen Boomtown - this style of play reminds me of that. Great series.

If no one has posted by tomorrow I will write about breaking through the line - I just wanted to explain my hesitance to flood the site with blood and guts, especially since I feared you all might have begun to notice and tendency for my writing to get gorier than yours.

Have a good one.
 
violence

I agree with Reaper that violence should not be dumbed down or polished over. Violence should be shocking and horrific.

That said, I also don't agree with gratuitious violence, or violence for its own sake. A lot of violence can be conveyed to the reader without being graphic. The audience's imagination is strong enough that they can see the picture. In fact, by painting it too clearly, one might rob the reader of something they should imagine.

I am also recommending that the violence be carefully done here. There is an awfully small group of really good rescuers doing this operation, and they have overwhelming firepower on their side. Even on the El the deathclaw would have to get through. Finally, one of the problems of the rescue is that the rescuers are pretty reluctant. Most of the townspeople would turn tale if it got too brutal and even the Heavy Infantry would back off if this got to be too costly.

Anyway, I am leaving this post to you guys so its your call. Just take these thoughts as suggestions.
 
I agree that gratuitous violence (or at least violence for its own sake) be generally avoided (I prefer - saved up important moments of breaking tension - exposive outbursts of brutal violence; sort of like Gabriel's encounter with Frank)

In this case, with a small number of rescuers cutting through the deathclaw it would end up like - 'the deathclaw charged, bullets riddled its body, spraying blood and gore aross the battlefield. Gabriel sliced into another beast, entrails slopped to the crimson ground etc. I wanted to avoid that because the constant barrage of bloody violence is what, I believe, dulls the senses to the brutality of real violence.
 
some ideas macro-plot

I'd like to get your feedback on plot development.

I have some ideas for the bigger- macro-plot (who the conspiracy is and what they are after, who their enemy is, the shape of the world, the big changes coming), but I divided between sharing these ideas or ruining the surprises.

As this is somewhere between role play and novel, I am reluctant to monopolize this. At the same time I don't want to give it away spoilers.

What do you think?

Also I just provided the link up between the escaping group and the rescuing group, but used Cerebus to do it.

Not sure how you guys feel about the pooch. I would prefer that he doesn't get whacked but I am willing to let the dog go. Just let me know.
 
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