Fallout 3 intro text

Starwars said:
One line that really bothers me in Fallout 2 was:
"Their spirits becoming part of the background radiation that blanketed the earth". Always hated that line, still think it feels really out of place. That intro is good otherwise from what I remember.
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the shadows burned into buildings etc at the Hiroshima and Nagasaki bombing were also refered to as 'spirits'.

if you wish, you don't need to see anything spiritual beyond the mention, just a reference.
 
Zero Pike said:
"Game Development.
Game development never changes.
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Dude, that was simply beautiful. I could hear Ron Perlman's voice reading that better than I could the FO3's intro.

As to the actual intro... It's passable. It sounds like the stuff I'd write when I'm suffering from writer's block, and need to put something there as 'filler material' until I come up with something better.

I have to agree, the whole "rock and bone" and "psychotic rage" lines, and complete failure to recognize the reason for the Great War, are all unattractively quirky. But, the "from God to justice to simple, psychotic rage" might seem to hint at, vaguely (and with a lot of mental contortions), the previous FO's (God=the Master, justice=the Enclave, psychotic rage=the non-canon games... both in terms of plotlines, and our respect for the games [nigh-deifying FO1, feeling FO2 did FO1 justice, and the anger felt towards FOT and POS])... but I might be grasping at straws at that.

The whole first paragraph could've been acceptable had they had written the beginning of the second paragraph like this: "In the year 2077, after millennia of armed conflict, the destructive nature of man could sustain itself no longer. Mankind, having drained the earth of its natural resources, committed itself to slaughter once again. The Great War was brought about as an inevitable power struggle over the last remaining amounts of fuel. The world was plunged into an abyss of nuclear fire and radiation. But it was not, as some had predicted, the end of humanity.".

The ending of the third paragraph would have been much better if it had been rewritten like this: "For on the fateful day, when fire rained from the sky, the giant steel door of Vault 101 slid closed... and never reopened. Because, in Vault 101, no one ever enters, and no one ever leaves. It was here that you were born. But, life in the vault is about to change."
 
Seraphim Pwns U said:
But, the "from God to justice to simple, psychotic rage" might seem to hint at, vaguely (and with a lot of mental contortions), the previous FO's (God=the Master, justice=the Enclave, psychotic rage=the non-canon games... both in terms of plotlines, and our respect for the games [nigh-deifying FO1, feeling FO2 did FO1 justice, and the anger felt towards FOT and POS])... but I might be grasping at straws at that.
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I think that it has more to do with present rise of religious fanaticism and events like 9/11, Afghanistan and Iraqi which are totally irrelevant to Fallout.

Seraphim Pwns U said:
The whole first paragraph could've been acceptable had they had written the beginning of the second paragraph like this: "In the year 2077, after millennia of armed conflict, the destructive nature of man could sustain itself no longer. Mankind, having drained the earth of its natural resources, committed itself to slaughter once again. The Great War was brought about as an inevitable power struggle over the last remaining amounts of fuel. The world was plunged into an abyss of nuclear fire and radiation. But it was not, as some had predicted, the end of humanity.".
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It still sounds wrong. The war had nothing to do with alleged destructive nature of man and everything to do with the end of civilisation and mankind losing it's creative powers.
 
It's not nearly as good as the previous intros. And I don't like how they keep using War never changes. They're going to use it twice there and if I remember correctly, the teaser is going to be in the intro as well (unless that is the intro?).
 
Joe Kremlin said:
It's not nearly as good as the previous intros. And I don't like how they keep using War never changes. They're going to use it twice there and if I remember correctly, the teaser is going to be in the intro as well (unless that is the intro?).
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Maybe the war, war never changes from the end of the teaser is the same as the first line of the intro so it's only used twice.
 
Because it's Bethesda?

Seraphim Pwns U said:
Sorrow said:
It still sounds wrong.
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Ennh, can't blame me for trying. *shrugs* ;)

So, how would you rewrite it?
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I wouldn't, I'm not a writer. Also, it's so bad that it should be deleted, thoroughly thought out and written anew without the crap about "psychotic rage", God, Justice, destructive nature (of Bethesda), etc.
 
Brother None said:
Australia's Atomic Magazine provides us with the intro text to Bethesda's Fallout 3, as voiced by Ron Perlman:<blockquote>War. War never changes. Since the dawn of human kind, when our ancestors first discovered the killing power of rock and bone, blood has been spilled in the name of everything, from God to justice to simple, psychotic rage.

In the year 2077, after millennia of armed conflict, the destructive nature of man could sustain itself no longer. The world was plunged into an abyss of nuclear fire and radiation. But it was not, as some had predicted, the end of the world. Instead, the apocalypse was simply the prologue to another bloody chapter of human history. For man had succeeded in destroying the world - but war, war never changes.

In the early days, thousands were spared the horrors of the holocaust by taking refuge in enormous underground shelters, known as vaults. But when they emerged, they had only the hell of the wasted to greet them - all except those in Vault 101. For on the fateful day, when fire rained from the sky, the giant steel door of Vault 101 slid closed... and never reopened. It was here you were born. It is here you will die because, in Vault 101, no one ever enters and no one ever leaves</blockquote>Thanks Specialist.
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I liked Patrick Stewarts speech in Oblivion better :? :)
 
It was here you were born. It is here you will die
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It may be that one plotline will lead to death in the Vault. Then everything seems okay with this part of sentence. Not mentioning "because no one leaves"
 
Doubt it. Sounds more just like a "badass" line more fit for Commando than Fallout.

"Remember when I said I'd kill you last? I lied."
 
DirtyDreamDesigner said:
This intro is much weaker than FO's and FO2's. Seriously, why must everything be so faux epic and half-assed with Bethesda?
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Exactly, i was thinking the same thing when i read the text. Both of the previous games intros had a certain epic feel to them too. After all, they told a tale of humans annihilating themselves and their world. But this one TRIES to be epic by using strong, definite (yet, strangely, in a generic context) words instead of clever narration.

It's been ten years. Wouldn't it be nice to have something about the exact cause of war in the intro? Countries involved? Some detailed Fallout history? Less forced epicry?

Bleh. It's still better then most of the other things in Fallout 3, though.
 
hmm, check the link in my signature, perhaps Bethesda should have done something like that instead, as their intro writing leaves much to ask.
 
This is a poor piece of writing. I have a bit of experience of editing and partially rewriting articles by others, including stuff like this written by ignorant teens that I cut straight out. Shallow and somewhat clunky. This doesn’t bode well for the quality of their writing, as it should be their best piece.

So humans are really just evil, psychotic bastards looking for excuses for committing acts of violence and destruction, like the excuses of humour and immersion respectively? Again Bethsoft misses the point, grabs onto a concept, distorts and exaggerates it.

I haven’t seen 2001 in a long while, but the first bit reminds me of the primitive scene. It doesn’t sound that bad to my ears, but the ignorance of the content is overwhelming. It is clichéd and irrational. People have complex motives for things, such as intolerance and competition for resources (you mean economic, not economical Sorrow, which is for thriftiness/efficiency etc., unless we want to speak ye olde Hillbillian). Nothing is simple and you can’t kill in the name of rage. The phrase ‘in the name of’ suggests that there is an ulterior motive anyway.

Oh yeah, I wonder if they misheard wasteland.
 
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