Brotherhood of Steel contest results

Congrats folks

 

Wow, so I did nearly make it!

 

Hello Brother None,

Yes my entry was a lot bigger initially and when I had problems cutting it back I asked two friends if they could help me scale it down and edit some of the contents.

I wonder, should I post the original or just the entry I sent in?

 

The stories are surprisingly good.

 

Yeah, but I don't think you people would like it should I start 'removing' members of NMA.

 

Personally, I enjoy solving mysterious murders.

So I'm going to close my eyes and count to a million and when I open them I want to see a whole pile of corpses.

 

Fun fact of the day: counting to one million will take you 11.5 days (longer if you take breaks to eat or sleep).

 

I really dig Kirby Go's entry. It's pretty unique, and has a real character to it. Best of all, the actual premise of a bunch of thugs usurping the Brotherhood's name for their own means really works for me. The other two were a bit "meh" to me, but they beat my entry, so thumbs up.

 

Yeah, I definitely tried to do a bit much, only to lead toward a fairly simplistic ending. I could have used the same "twist" in a more focused, and less roundabout way.

On reflection, "meh" is probably overly harsh. They were all good, I just thought Kirby's was great.

 

Yep, good stuff I must say. Feel a bit bad about sending out one as half-assed as I did.

 

Just wanted to add my congratulations to the winner(s) and say thanks for the contest. I was glad to have the opportunity to refine my own thoughts on the subject (and read those of others).

 

Eh, more time for Dutch to murder people.

 

Out of the three stories presented I must say I enjoyed Kirby Go's most. The others are good as well, of course, but Kirby offered the most intersting and original and compelling idea (in my very humble opinion), an idea which incidentally could explain the grunt-like behavior of BoS soilders featured in the demo, as noted by BN. Refrences to the chosen one's escapades were a nice touch. Higher word limit probably would've helped, and I find the initial BoS encounter and its outcome a little fantastic, but I really like the general plot motive.

Congratulations to everybody that submitted, escpecially to Tucker and the runner ups, for having the motivational will to get off their asses and contribute. Its been a pleasure thus far. Thank You. I look forward to reading the rest of the entries as they surface.



Question to Aaron Moyer: Just wondering, did you actually finish the whole of Paradise Lost? I'm still navigating my way through its first quadrant, after a few months of (sporadic) intensive "reading". It's a mighty convoluted piece of work. Mon respect if you managed to tame the literary beast.

 

These were excellent reads all three. Amazing A grade work.

My favourite was Kirby Go's -- not only was it enjoyable reading, it felt like Fallout for me, a natural and smooth progression of the story.

Since I still have the blind poet on the brain let me toss out one of the only quotes I recall as it seems fitting in the context - "The superior man acquaints himself with sayings of antiquity and many deeds of the past, in order to strengthen his character."