Hi Killap,
I have two little suggestions concerning the EPA.
1.) The Head of security uses german curse words. But it sounds a bit forced and out of place. It actually sounds like a non-german speaker wrote the dialogues (I hope I don't insult anyone here).
As a native speaker I was happy that you incorporated a reference to germany, but I was also a bit dissapointed with the implementation.
2.) Kitsume's story about the two different eyes is a pretty blunt plagiarism of the "Cowboy Bebop" character Spike Spiegel.
The thing with the japanese name was pointed out before, but i'd like to mention it again .
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Thank you for the RP by the way. Great work.
I have two little suggestions concerning the EPA.
1.) The Head of security uses german curse words. But it sounds a bit forced and out of place. It actually sounds like a non-german speaker wrote the dialogues (I hope I don't insult anyone here).
As a native speaker I was happy that you incorporated a reference to germany, but I was also a bit dissapointed with the implementation.
2.) Kitsume's story about the two different eyes is a pretty blunt plagiarism of the "Cowboy Bebop" character Spike Spiegel.
The thing with the japanese name was pointed out before, but i'd like to mention it again .
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Thank you for the RP by the way. Great work.